Wings

So I started this as a piece for a Contest, but it kinda turned into something totally different...

 

"Let me help"

He whispered to me

As he wiped

Away a tear from my cheek

I looked up at him

From the spot on the floor

Where I was on my knees

"There's no hope for me"

I whispered back

As I looked into his hazel eyes

My heart ached with every beat

My mind closed down

Nothing around me but darkness

Until he came around

A halo over his head

And a gold light around it

That covered him to his feet

"There is always hope for thee that are seeking forgivness"

He said

Whispering again

I looked away from him then

And down at the cold wood floor

As I brought a hand up

To the Angel necklace

That hung between my breasts

And gently held it

Between two fingers

"I don't seek forgiveness...I seek acceptance"

I whispered to him

So quietly

That I wasn't sure he even heard

But he did

And as he knelt down

On his knees in front of me

He put a hand under my chin

And lifted my head up

Until my eyes looked into his

Then he smiled slightly

Before he whispered

"Then acceptance is what you shall receive"

The ache in my throat grew bigger

Along with my fear

And I tried to shake my head "No"

But his hand held it in place

"Let me help you. Do not be afraid, my dear"

I couldn't look in his eyes anymore

So I looked down at his chest

And the rosary that hung around his neck

"Let me help"

He whispered again

And I felt a sudden shock of warmth fill my body

And I heard a rustle of feathers behind me

I turned my head

And caught a glimpse of my freshly received wings

Spreading out behind my back

I looked at him again

And felt my lips curve into a small smile

He smiled back

And as he wiped away the rest of my tears

He whispered

"You have been both forgiven and accepted...so wings are what you shall receive"

 

Author's Note

Im thinking it might need a little more work...but thought I would post it anyways...I think it might make an apperance in the book that Im writing...tell me what you think of it!

Reviews

[Manda]

i honestly dont think it needs any work. this was very heart felt, sincere, emotional, cute, descriptive... I really enjoyed this. this is my favorite piece from you that i have had the privileged of reading. its so perfect in everyway! do hope you keep up the good work! oh this is simply amazing. i wanted to keep reading! even at the last line i was upset it was the end because i just enjoyed it so very much! please! i think it would be a good idea to put this in your book. more people could read it. plus its just simply beautiful!

[Dani]

awesome, I love the story!!

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

u tell a very nice story!

[alan.essam]

great

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

No, don't change it! It's so simple and sweet! It's like a rebirth...

[Krazy On The Outside]

I love it!!
It's like a whole little story in a poem! It's amazing!!
And, yeah you should totally put this in your book!! =)

[Jenny Nelson]

I think this is absolutely beautiful. Such a heartfelt and heartwrenching piece. Great description to convey both a meaning and a picture.

[Galldora King]

Its pretty good .No doubt about that. A bit of work is all it needs.