Girl on the Corner Block

 

It feels like tomorrow will never come.

Endless days

Endless nights

Endless running

Lonely streets

              Deserted roads

                                Abandoned Lanes

Strange faces

Rain pours down, thunder crashes, lightning strikes

Splits apart trees

Like the roots of her soul

The stem of her heart

 

Why?

 

Why keep going

Giving up would be easier

So much easier

Throw it all away like litter

 

Like life

 

End the endless endlessness

Endless nothingness

 

Nothing.

 

Everything left behind

Gone forever

No moon

No stars

No hopes

No dreams

 

No food.

 

Never going back

In the morning there’ll always be a new day

But right now it feels like tomorrow will never come.

A new day will never dawn

One endless day of night

 

Aching cold

As cold as her circle of hope

Night getting colder

Freezing

For forever

 

A girl on the corner block

 

Hair drips in her face

Like sodden leaves

And branches

Alone

 

Street light flickers

Dies.

Cold, dark world lies beyond

The vanquished circle of light

Frightened

Haunted by the ticking of the church clock

Counting down the minutes

The seconds

Before the stalking shadows pounce

No safe place to hide

No place to go inside

Her tears have dried

            Turned to ice

 

 

 

 

 

                     I’m just that girl on the corner block.

 

Author's Note

I know the layout is pretty weird, but oh well. <<

Reviews

[Mimi]

I loved the flow of this piece, and I thought it was a very great write. I like the part where you wrote:

"Street light flickers
Dies.
Cold, dark world lies beyond
The vanquished circle of light
Frightened
Haunted by the ticking of the church clock
Counting down the minutes
The seconds
Before the stalking shadows pounce
No safe place to hide
No place to go inside"

You can almost feel the paranoia that starts to set it as she has no place to hide as the street light dies and the sound of the church clock. The emotions in this piece were very well expressed. Great job and keep up the wonderful writes.

[deeps]

I really like this, ike the emotion , it tells a pretty powerful story.
I have felt these kind of feelings once or twice in my life.
It's a very well expressed write.

[Amy L. Arend]

I think that the layout kinda distracts you from the poem itself.

Perhaps if you had it more aligned with the words you want to execptionally STAND OUT moved around then it will have more impact.
The writing itself is excellent, try to avoid the repeition of adjectives unless it's intended.

Great job overall :)