Parrallels

I saw an aging flower today
All alone and slowly dying
A single tear slid down my cheek
I felt better for the crying

There is so much deep inside
That I keep hidden out of sight
Walls of pain that I put up
Built to hide me from the light

Could you take away the hurt
If I reached blindly for your hand
Or would you simply turn away
And not want to understand

So many reasons I hold on
None of which I can explain
But my time will one day end
Like a gentle summer rain

I saw an aging flower today
All alone and slowly dying
A single tear slid down my cheek

I felt better for the crying

Reviews

[M.Babu]

This was a fantastic stanza!:

"There is so much deep inside
That I keep hidden out of sight
Walls of pain that I put up
Built to hide me from the light "

Very good story told with your light words, though they leave a deep laceration of emotion on your readers. Few authors innately possess such ability and thus continue to build and refine on that. This was completely amazing Jess. GREAT JOB

[Crow]

An awesome and beautiful piece, life is so short to be hidden by fear and pain. You have touched the darkness with your light, inspiring.

Thank you!

[LadyNaida]

Crying is good for the soul and for healing. But what happens after all the crying and then you feel empty inside. What if you have given all you can, but never get anything in return, what than?

[Kiri Nells]

Oh, so beautiful! No critique here! Great write!

[Thea Fuentebella]

touching and captivating.. you are a great weaver of emotions, my dear. keep it up!
100/100

[Short.Nerd]

Very good! Excellent job! Keep up the good work;)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem with a very good story. Tears do bring peace to a sad heart. I like the use of the flower and life. The poem was a pleasure to read. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

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I so like this, and can relate. I have done that for years. I have the biggest and tallest barriers. lol
Love the flow and rhyming as always

[MichelleClay]

I really like this. Especially how you described putting barriers up to protect yourself. Deep down we all want someone to take away the hurt away but we fear rejection and that often leaves us having to just cope and hold on.

[Murtuza]

I like the tone of your poem. I like these lines a lot-
"So many reasons I hold on
None of which I can explain
But my time will one day end
Like a gentle summer rain "
very well written. Good job!