Broken

Broken hearts, love's deceit,
pieces fall down to my feet.
Broken promises, love's a lie,
puddles form from tears I cry.
Broken dreams, love's illusion,
sorrowed cause of your intrusion.
Broken hope, love's a game,
doesn't last, ends the same.
Broken sleep, love's the cause,
digs at me with sharpened claws.
Broken spirit, love of sorrow,
stolen now is my tomorrow.
Broken life, love is lost,
Broken now and that's the cost.

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

The form of this poem and the rhyming of it is perfect. It read almost like a song within itself. Love is always constant it is us who are flacky about love. We treat it mearly as a chemical that makes us feel good and we never understand that to love someone is to chose to love them even after the chemical goes away. Great write.

[LadyNaida]

This is beautiful Jessica. A lot of emotion and expression of a broken heart stage by stage. But after all we survive.

[Kiri Nells]

I love this poem! It's so well written and heartfelt! Masterpiece!

[Jessica Alvarez]

thnx you guys for the wonderful comments :)

[Ruth]

Sometimes the outweighing of the cost is so not worth it, it seems, I often wonder if it is better to have loved, than not! Great work love xx

[MichelleClay]

I really related to this, especially 'pieces fall down to my feet'. When you have had your heart broken like that, you really feel as if pieces of 'you' are falling away, leaving you broken beyond repair

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

It takes a lot of courage to cross that line of trust.
You communicate that without flaw.

[Alexis]

I was with one of my friends this past weekend and I drew an Ed Hardey picture that says "Love is a gamble". This poem reminded me of that. Your rhyming, like SpokenWord said, was perfect. You made it look very easy. I'm pretty sure most of us can relate to what was said in this poem. Great job. Keep on writing! :D

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A heartfelt poem on the heartache, reality and many facets of love.