Invisible girl

Invisible girl

A Poem by jessb0407

Always hiding from the world trying to scream..
but no on can hear 

seeing things she shouldn't see hearing things she 
shouldn't hear 

no one can see the real her 
she is invisible 

Afraid to show her true colors 
to colors to the world 

thinking of what people might think 

so she hides and tries to fit in with 
the crowd but she doesn't know 
how much longer she can take it  

© 2011 jessb0407


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I like it. That kind of angst you feel is foreign when you are younger and so boring when you are older!! lol You just need more years behind you to put some of these things in better perspective. There's a reason why some of that crowd won't make it to your future!! : ) Keep writing..... xoxo -Mark

Posted 12 Years Ago


Maybe split the second line into two?

Seeing things she shouldn't see
Hearing things she shouldn't see

I think it would improve the overall aesthetic of the piece

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh my GODS! This is... AWESOME! I love this, I really do. You worked hard on this, I can tell. I love it, keep going. Very great write, my friend. I really like this. Keep it going, my friend.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on March 1, 2011
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jessb0407
jessb0407

west wareham, MA



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