Fear of Flying

As I gaze up at the clear sky
Watching sterlings sore by
Can't help but miss it
Floating, weightless, airborne
But I've crashed so many times before
My fear keeps me planted on the ground
Much like a flower, waiting
Waiting for either sunshine or rain
To warm my petals or shower me with life
But stuck waiting all the same
Safely on the ground
Envying my flighted friends
But to no end
My roots of fear, pain, and grief have me bound
They are too deep now
I used to fly
I used to love like that
Now I just wait in my garden
And watch the birds

Author's Note

Please feel free to critique

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story and honest tone of the words. You took the reader to the strong ending.
"I used to love like that
Now I just wait in my garden
And watch the birds "
It is sad when we become less fearless and accept less. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jessalynn]

Thank you so much for your encouraging words I was kind of worried that the ending wasn't as strong as I would've liked it to be. I'm glad for the input it makes me feel more confident about this piece

[Coyote Poetry]

Was a good closing and you are welcome.

[Chris]

" Oh how torturous it is to have a poets soul with none of the grit. " - THAT is one thought-full line.

"sore" - actually works though more would likely have used soar.
Truth and reality for too very many... understandable.

[Jessalynn]

Thank you for your input. I appreciate the comments.

[Bare trees]

I like it although for me it might be too literal. Some lines may need to switch. I'll have to read it more but it's a good poem. Nice job.

[Mackenzie Palma]

I absolutely love this piece. I like the fact that there can be so many different interpretations of it. I think your take on this is great. I enjoyed being able to relate to it in my own personal way. My favorite lines are "My roots of fear, pain and grief have me bound/They are too deep now". I also really like the way you ended the poem. It left an image in my head that kept me thinking for a while after reading. Truly moving. Keep up the great work.

[David Scott]

To have the faith of a child again would be a blessing. We can I think. We just have to forget what we think we "know" and become curious of the possibilities once more. Still, there is value in working the "gardens" of life as well as "flying".
I really enjoyed the poetry and the subtle intelligence of the write.

[A hare off]

Sadness and longing for what once was blooms in this garden. This piece was sad, the tone was lonely and the desire to fly once again, to cast off those fears and soar into the skies of love was strongly felt. From start to your wonderful finish, this was incredible.

[Rob Santana]

I love the passion you've penned. The imagery is emotionally powerful. Well done.

[Damien]

I can only say that I love it and don't have much of critique, especially the ending caught me.
You really write with strong emotions so to say.

[TheWynnedow]

I loved this because I can relate to it. My experiences are obviously not the same, but the idea of once being able to fly and now standing still on the ground watching others soar by is so relatable. The description was perfect, and there was great flow to the poem too. Great work!

[Jessalynn]

I'm really glad you found this relatable the idea of being hurt and being afraid to do what hurt you again is what made me write this poem. It's part of the reason I write poetry is to connect with other people have people connect with me I'm very glad that you like to piece. Thank you so much for the review