Heart For Rent

Poem about how it felt to play the love game and lose.

I have been evicted 

Cast into the murky alley 

Who could have predicted 

Wouldn't have guessed this as our finale

Don't know why I was addicted

It's not in my mentality 

To be so afflicted

By a love with no morality

But you were my home

Not much of a home

With your cardboard heart and your vacant eyes

Your soul was hollow yet full of lies

What I mistook for passion became a possession

Love laced with deception turned into obsession

Keeping you was a game I had to win

Driving me to the brink of a looney bin

Was it such a sin?

To want to win?

To be let in?

Even if only held together by safety pins

Waiting to burst at any moment

Thought you were my lover 

Turns out you were my opponent

No use to be a proponent

No use to plead my case

I was only just renting this space.

Author's Note

please tell me what you thought.

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

I love the flow to this write and how you poured out emotions... very honest and that's what
made it most enjoyable. I can relate to the hurt and the pain...the disappointment and the
loneliness the comes after the heartbreak. Excellent job expressing yourself :)

[Chris]

Strange how so few ever "see" themselves ...losing... isn't it?

Do we always go in with our eyes open? And if we DID - how do we "lose" when we know WHAT we are willing to do AND accept from the start?

[Jessalynn]

I have a couple written about this particular relationship. He was a wolf in sheep clothing. Read Sweet things. Its crazy what loves makes us accept in another person who can't do the same for you.

[EJ's Horror]

Very good, Jessalynn, I can see hear an alternative rock band singing it!

[SmittyJas]

Many a lost love has this in common renting one love is a bad obsession blind by love and played for a fool you both were not playing by the same rules. I would rather be stranded on a deserted Island with out love and on one to call for my broken heart leave me alone this kind of love bites and smarts.

[Jessalynn]

THANK YOU FOR ALL OF YOUR REVIEWS THEY MADE MY DAY!!!!! :)

[Riley]

I can relate, the most unlovable person is strangely the easiest sometimes to fall for and the reasons why are often for having to do with the person falling for them. Vacant eyes are trapping, you gaze too long looking for life, love, and soul and before you know it you are trapped, with no escape but through your own suffering and most of the time that isn't even enough. People like that only want to feed off of those who honestly care. People who are good in soul and in spirit who will give until it hurts and until they have to start giving away themselves. Then you, that good soul, are left with nothing but to give but your own life...and it hurts because they might want that....but I would never want that from you. Beautiful, your writing is in every way. Very captivating and I love your use of imagery. ^-^ much love and hugs

[andrew mitchell]

What a river of a flow. Love the emotion, the raw thoughts projected! Excellent poetry!

[Inject Positivity]

We all need such a place....Wow! I loved the thought behind this poetry....Loved the last part most....

[Jordan Smith]

This is amazing!!! I really enjoyed this piece. The description of the home was my favorite part. Really nice piece. Can't wait to see what's next.

[Shielah Yuyama]

The words you've chosen for each line is striking. Very strong. The flow of emotion until the last line is perfect. Great piece :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of words. I liked the honest and the direct tone of the thoughts.
"No use to plead my case
I was only just renting this space."
You made the reader feel the need, lost and accepting in the amazing poetry.
Coyote