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A spoken word poem.

I know it may seem like I'm perfectly fine
But you don't see the loneliness and tears that I cry
I'm broken and on the surface it may seem like a crack
But I'm shattered and all the peices are hard to fit back
I'm pulling myself through each new day
The weight on my back makes me feel like a slave
Full of passion but too tired to dream
I'm drifting desperately through oblivion's sea
Sometimes I drift so far that I'll finally scream
I cry out for help and then remember my pride
The reason I don't talk and bottle everything inside
Do they really need to know about the pain that I feel
My strength and my confidence is all I reveal
Because let's face it our smiles aren't usually real
We are all just solders fighting the battle of life
Telling ourselves we're okay and believing the lie
Maybe if there was less judgment we'd speak the truth
But it's all a competition and fake smiles are proof
So I'll give you one last smile and then poof it'll be gone
It's time to fight authentically 'cause the war has just begun

Reviews

[Mr. Malarkey]

Loneliness is such a cruel reality so many of us have to live through day by day. Calling into the void, never hearing a response so desperately wanted, and left to fight our own battles. Thank you for sharing this

[That1Nerd23]

Yes, a cruel reality indeed. And it is often so hard to find people who are willing to share in your struggles or listen when you're feeling down. It's a sad world out there. That's why I flee to nature because I know the earth is such a pure form of therapy.

[Mr. Malarkey]

I believe there's always hope, no matter how bad things get and there will be someone out there who will listen. Although finding them can be a hassle. At least you can take solace in knowing the Earth will always be there to listen to you.

[Chris]

"Life as we live it - seldom as we want it."

[emipoemi]

Story of my life, this one. The feeling of loneliness, that no one is really there; that people just live a lie because of what people think and whatnot, and make everyone carry a burden as a result.

Not particularly sure how to read the triads, which at first took me aback as the musicality flowing from couplet to couplet flowed so well that the triads kind of break from that in a jarring way. It's a good break - both of them - it's the just the initial musicality that I found in this poem doesn't particularly flow into the triads as easily on the first read, is all.

But this is remarkable. Very much a gem of a piece (missing an 'i' in "solders" - "soldiers" is the word you're looking for). Well freaking done!!

[Shineheemi]

I love this poem. This is one of my favorite now, this kind of poem is my forte lucky to see this. It is true. I strongly agree, made me speechless. Very well said.