Dungeon Walls

For eighteen years I’ve been locked in this dungeon

I’ve been waiting to be brought back to life

I am blinded by the black walls that surround me

I am dressed in tears, mold, and a web of lies

 

“What do I do now?” whispers my soul

“How shall I ever escape?”

A tear rolls down and then I hear a sound

Here comes the one who pushed me away

 

“What have you done!?” screams a woman

“You wretched little beast!”

She walks my way and takes me by the hair

And everything fades so suddenly

Blurred sight, cold figure, darkness swallows me whole

Fainting heart, tattered faith, I have no more control

Twelve hours do pass and the woman is cheering

Perhaps she thinks I’m dead

 When all at once my body is lifted

Yet my soul then rises instead

I’ve been set free by grace

No longer feeling dead

Jesus has taken my place

“Tis finished!” He said

Author's Note

Such is the way of life.
Let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Salar Majak]

wow this is just wow, i love it,it made myheart beat, it's great,keep up

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate that! I am so glad you like it. ((:

[Geist Von PA]

This is why I love literature. To some people, the Dungeon is a metaphor for inner struggle. To others it could merely be a captive waiting to be freed by a "knight in shining armor". Although the meaning is the same, it is depicted differently within the mind's eye of the reader.

[That1Nerd23]

Yes, as do I. Isn't that something? I love how everyone can pull something different from poetry, it's a wonderful thing! Thanks again for your review.

[Arte Por Vida]

This is so amazing. I just.. I love it. And I feel like I can relate to the girl in the poem. I love Jesus' rescue at the end, too. So perfect.

[That1Nerd23]

Thanks! I appeciate it. Yeah, Jesus always saves the day-cause He's the Man, the great I AM!!

[Jeremia]

Wow. I absolutely loved it. Especially the 4th line and all of the 4th stanza. I really did enjoy this one.

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you, friend! ((:
Glad you liked it!
I'm hoping that I've improved. (:

[Jeremia]

The amount that you write, if you haven't improved, I'd be worried. You certainly did succeed in making a good poem here tho.

[That1Nerd23]

Haha. Thank you, brotha friend!! ((:

[Westminster Abbey]

Oh, wow. The first part reminded me of a movie I once saw... What was it? I think it had something to do with Snow White, or maybe Sleeping Beauty...

Anyway, this poem is amazing, astounding, marvelous! (I've been working on my adjectives (: ) I love it! There is always hope in God the Father! No matter how grim your life is on earth, you will always have the chance to live a more fulfilled eternal life with your rightful Daddy. Jesus died so that that could happen, for God so loved the world.

Such is the way of life... 100/100!!!

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you so much for your review and for the terrific reminder that God is more than our Lord, He is our Father-our Abba Father! That's such an outstanding truth and I so appreciate you sharing it! Thank you so much for taking the time to read, review, and rate my poem!

[Westminster Abbey]

Oh, good, you use the term Abba Father too. I didn't know if I should put that because some people don't know what it is. :)

[Westminster Abbey]

btw, I love the picture!

[That1Nerd23]

Yes, of course. Abba Father=Daddy...love it!! ((: Thanks!