The Man on the Train

 

I see a man six feet tall

Dark skin and greying hair

He has little strength, if at all

I see hurt behind his stare

 

There is no joy and much discomfort

Written on his ageing face

You can see the hard work and effort

By his persuasive grace

 

But he’s running, yes, he’s fleeing

There’s no more looking back

He’s tired and can’t stand seeing

The strength and boldness he lacked

 

And now he sits here waiting

Across from me on this train

He says not a word, he’s not complaining

But inside he’s going insane

 

So he lives in fear of the past recreating

Yet lives also in fear of change

He sits broken from the mess he’s making

His problems simply rearrange 

Reviews

[Jeremia]

I kinda feel like this guy. Except I cant keep my mouth shut. :/ And I'm white.

[That1Nerd23]

Yeah? :/
Everything is going to be okay.

[Jeremia]

All things work for the good of those called according to his purpose. I'm well aware. Doesn't change the heartache now. So if you will, pray for me. That hers and my heart will be healed from the pain that was caused.

[Arte Por Vida]

This is simply wonderful and beautiful.

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you!

[Jason Dyer]

Sounds like someone who could provide interesting conversation, yet learn from someone possibly younger.

[That1Nerd23]

Hm. Yes, perhaps. (:

[Harry Alston]

Great little insight into something that appears so simple at first :)

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you. (:

[Daniel88Batson]

This would be so affective in a short film. Very good. For me this is a poem written for film and not a solo piece but none-the-less very very very very good!
I don't like the use of diligently however, maybe rethink that phrasing.
Good writing. Do continue. Dan

[That1Nerd23]

Hm. Interesting thought. I respect that.
I didn't like it very well myself. I will try to rethink and revise that. Thank you for your input. (:

[BladeofStars]

I like the dark, yet true, mood of this poem. I like the word choice. :)

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you so much. I am very glad you liked it. (:

[Cerise]

very well written ...wonderful...

[That1Nerd23]

Thank you. (:

[J. Viands]

Well done I’ve personally sat in the very seat of that same old man I know it’s not for me but thank you for the acknowledgment

[That1Nerd23]

I see. Well, I assure you, you needn't run. Life is not a race, it's a journey. (:

[Cynthia Man]

This is really great.. As people age, they're a lot of challengers we got to face or some already overcome... There's people who are broken, they're people who still live on... This is how life is... there's just to go on or to give up...
Anyways,Great write!

[That1Nerd23]

Yes, what you say is true. I appreciate your review. Thank you so much. (:

[Shamsuddin Mazed]

Life is fully journey........
It's may be different in every stage....So, Alert every time.

[That1Nerd23]

Yes, very true. Well said.