Rising From The Blue

Believe in yourself and aim for the stars :)

Rising From The Blue

She sits all alone

By her window sill

Her future is unknown

Like clouds over the hill

 

Wonders what’s in store for her

Will all her dreams come true

But everything seemed a blur

As anxieties increasingly grew

 

But then she recalls

The best of advice

She won’t ever fall

For she won’t be born twice

 

Create your own life

And work hard for it

You won’t get it twice

Make your choices worth it

 

And enjoy it to its fullest too

As it’s an essential aspect

Don’t waste your time in blue

Otherwise you’ll regret

 

Life is a precious gift

Fate is your decision

So let your hopes uplift

Cause you’re worth appreciation

Author's Note

After a long time, I am pleased to present this poem. Its about hope, about finding light in the dark parts of your life.

I would like to thank two people specifically for helping me out with their sincere opinions ; Barleygirl and echoes of eros- thank you people

Happy Reading!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm a little amazed you're thanking me, becuz I can't remember what I might've done. I did feel familiarity while reading, so maybe I've commented before. Pardon my bad memory. I like the way your message starts out with a person in a funk, then she goes on to remember some good advice, then feeling better, finishing with this uplifting advice, stated as if being remembered. I love the line "don't waste your time in blue" (so true! but many of us cannot help our blue moods!) I especially love the last line. Everyone is craving appreciation.

In the 2nd stanza, you start with present tense, then switch to past tense for the last 2 lines. If you changed "seemed" to "seems" and "grew" to "grow" . . . your poem would be more consistent.

[1Disawsum]

Woah what a simply but beautifully written powerful poem! I definitely agree, it's not worth always feeling blue as you won't live life twice. Live it up, and when you look back, you'll realise just how amazing life was for and to you. Love it, keep it up! xxx

[Jess]

Thank you darling

[Ardra Nair]

Nice poem Jess! Keep writing :)

[Dash the Reaper]

Life is a precious gift
Fate is your decision
So let your hopes uplift
Cause you’re worth appreciation

i liked the last part the most,well written & keep it up

[Jess]

thank you :)

[annalysiar]

This poem has great form, and a beautiful message.
this is a wonderful peice and I'm glad to have read it
I'm sorry it took so long to reply.
I really enjoyed reading this peice

[Warrior]

The ABAB rhyme scheme is a good way to get the poem flowing in which you have. The poem has some life lessons such as not being born twice, and working hard, and that is something that people can relate to. If people have some kind of connection to your work, then they'll love it. Great way of putting it out.

[Jerryyoung1z]

An excellent write, every man is his own star, our future is what we make it to be. Very inspiring, don't dwell in the past, don't dream too much of the future, but concentrate the mind on the present moment, and make the best out of it. Thanks for sharing.

[Everett DeValle]

Gosh, that youthful spirit...I admire that...I'm sure that coming of age yet it is important facet in life...the secret to life...is to commit and let go...not in that order but it's a crazy crazy world. :)

I truly enjoyed the rhyme scheme that made sense with each stanza. Thank you for sharing. Awesome job. :)

~Ev

[Jess]

Thank you so so much.

[wordman]

and a wonderful write it is,full of hope and wisdom on life ..

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the ending.
"Life is a precious gift
Fate is your decision
So let your hopes uplift
Cause you’re worth appreciation"
I like the logic of the about lines. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote