The Cost Of One’s Nature

A psychological poem about guilt and repercussions.

No man is sinless

But I’m a sin on my own

No man is free of mess

But my seeds have already been sown

 

Various crimes did I commit

But the biggest one is my existence

In here I’ve struggled to live and fit

But realized I’ve no importance

 

Constant thoughts trouble my mind

One after another

Answers to which I can't find

My anguish will be forever

 

Guilt now seems a part of life

Life which has sunk in apathy

But I’ll be dead so no more strife

Until I’ll be buried in agony

Author's Note

This poem is written with the presence of a deep mind. Hope its worth. And special thanks to the person who helped me with deciding the title and reviewing it before I even posted it ;)

Reviews

[T.C. Yarbrough]

I think you could dig into this deeper and bring forth more interest. I wouldn't worry about keeping it in this form, In my singular view, rhythm is far more important than rhyme, that's just me, you may feel different. Two things you may want to think about, one is details, what is the guilt, the constant thoughts, the crimes etc., the other is considering whether absolutes fit and are truthful (sometimes they do work), expressions like "anguish will be forever" and such can have the potential to close off the reader's imagination and sound generic and also I bet it is true that though the anguish may be lifelong, it is not constant, There are breaks in the clouds, however brief. Anyhow, I hope that helps in anyway. I am no different in you, just trying to inch my way forward. Peace. Thanks for sharing I enjoyed reading it.

[hcarson]

Yea..i get this one, it is something i certainly relate too. Well done jess :)

[Riddhi]

This poem is really nice and when i was going through it i was feeling it because with each and every word of poem i can easily attach myself...Actually that is the quality of a true writer who makes his reader attached and feel truth in each and every word...The quality which i found in you...Your use of language and intelligent use of words is even more appreciable...
Never do leave writing...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Riddhi

[Jess]

Thank you so much for your heartfelt wishes. i'm so honored

[Riddhi]

Your most welcome....

[David Marsden]

Hi Jess, I've not be on the site for a while, hence the delay.
You have a way of expressing emotions strongly. A few short words tell a story so dramatically. You certainly have a talent for writing with feeling.
This poem seems to sugest that it is about you and your problems with dealing with the past. If this is the case you have to let go, maybe you already do this by putting your thought down this way.
Just remember no-one is worthy of judging you, everyone has regrets, we deal with them by being forgiven and forgiving ourselves. This makes us stronger, then we can go on expressing ourselves because we have the ability to do so in a non-judgemental and free way. Live free, respect people and be happy. You have nothing to fear or be sad for so live a happy life and keep turning out amazing verse.

[Tina Marie]

I would include the crimes and sins. It would make it more interesting. Listen to "If I Die Young," on YouTube.com. Read some Emily Dickinson and Edgar Allen Poe. This poem is from a certain area of poetry to be learned. As always, it is really good. Please keep going.

[Capaneus]

gets right to disparaging and commences wallowing like a razor blade on the roof's ledge while it drizzles. it isn't good enough for a suicide note however,:P guess you'll have to keep writing

[1]

Deep and very thought provoking...................... There is much pain in wisdom.

[Amberlilies]

This is a great piece. I can remember several times throughout my own life where my own guilt has had me feeling the same types of feelings. It can be difficult to accept that guilt is a part of life. During tough times when I am feeling guilty, it does seem that the only true relief will come when I die. You truly captured the essence of what it means to feel overwhelming guilt. This is very honest and very relatable. Thank you for posting this!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Jess,
You are a most attractive lady and----the poem is exquisite.
I sense that you are bothered by guilt and conflict of soul.
Am most anxious to see you cast those bad feelings to the wind.
You have everything to be thankful for, talent, beauty, everything.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Alexander Cain]

That is amazing. So thoughtful.

[KnightOfAnarchy]

I feel like with this poem there is a sense of time, on how it is running out to forgive yourself.
But after your deed is said and done sometimes it doesn't make a difference .