Dear Mr. Death

Dear Mr Death
I'm writing this letter to tell you I'll never forget
How you impacted my life with your bites and your stings
The songs you made me sing and the pain that you bring

With the help of your wife Mrs Fear
You took my mom away from me when I needed her there
The doctors told her she had cancer when I was five years old
"What does that mean?" I asked her, the world became so cold
She stopped drinking, stopped eating, she lost the will to live
I watched her shrink, I watched her sink, I watched her falling like a leaf
You saw an opportunity to strike, which you did and she was gone
She slept and couldn't wake up to the glory of the morning sun

Dear Mr death
I'm writing this letter to tell you I'll never forget
What you did to me at five, my daddy felt it the hardest
He lost all color in his life, my daddy was the saddest
He got detached, got withdrawn, hardly talks to anyone
He drinks and he smokes, doesn't care for me anymore
It got so bad he attempted suicide, not once or twice
You should have taken him the first time, for he attempted five times
He eventually succeeded you see, after drinking some concortions
Locked himself in a room of steel, the lock was a strange contortion
I can never forget his wailing, his shouting and his screams
The sound so inhuman, they still haunt me in my dreams
And his last words to me "Live your life my son. Don't let death take you, don't be like me or your mom"

So I've always put up a fight against you
Like when you starred me in the eye when I was twenty two
Now my body is filled with scars, evidence of battles fought
A tale for each scar, through the long years uncut
Now I'm old Mr death, I've lived my life to the fullest
Surrounded by grand and great grand kids, out of life I've made the best
I've spent the good parts of my life well, they're past and gone
I forgive you Mr death for all what to me you've done
You're not as evil as I thought for there is life in you
Cause everyone you have taken, got their life back anew
So when the time comes for me to go, I shall follow you through the bend
You shall lead and I shall follow, not as a foe but as a friend.

Reviews

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A tough write, Jerry.

If it is truth or fiction, i do not know, but you have tackled a very tough topic in a courageous way. There will be many people who read this poem and find they can relate to it. Cancer is the demon of the modern era. Not one family would have escaped it's ravenous touch. And Death forever lurks in the darkness for all of us, just waiting to seize his moment, and strike us down. That you have written to forgive death is an admirable quality, for many would not take that path.
Keep up the writing, Jerry. You have scope and imagination. A very courageously written poem.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you for the review. It's 100 percent fiction.

[Bina]

Often I write about death and loss. This is something very few face but such a stark part of life. I see this as a brave and courageous poem.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review.

[Karmee]

now this is wonderful, I enjoyed the depth & imagery in this.
I tempted suicide once in my life, never again. I was being bullied so bad,
I just wanted my life to end. I have done it again, I had to go through
Therapy and it sucked. I appreciate the story behind this.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you, for reviewing. I'm sorry about that, almost everyone has been been bullied once or twice or a couple hundred times in their live, but the main problem is how we handle it. Thanks again for stopping by and sharing your own little story

[Lord of mad men]

wow! this is wonderful. i love how you see that in the beging then the end. it flowed together so nicely like the wind the flows under a ravens wings. i loved every line and word. you have shown you fan life life on of two ways your way or the worlds way but ether way you will still walk with mr death in the end. so i ask you all how will you and how do you life your lifes?

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for stopping by.

[Lee]

it is quite broad in a sense,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,but get the meaning.........................that is life and you have to accept it...here you have no option to forgive but are compelled to do...............overall impressive one............cheers

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[Lee]

my pleasure dear poets

[barleygirl]

Very original, honest, & full of impact. Creative idea to use the "writing a letter" format, starting with the early deaths, then progressing to the part about overcoming obstacles & living a full life anyhow. Your stanza describing the father's struggle is especially poignant & vivid . . . this is the poster child for digging deep & using true-to-life details to make writing POP! I hope this isn't autobiographical, but if it is, I applaud you for being a survivor & not becoming bitter.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks again for you review. It isn't autobiographical, like a friend of mine do say "just words" thanks for your concern.

[Whisper]

This brought me to tears, it was beautiful but sad. I have no words to describe this. Good job! ;-;

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review Whisp. I appreciate it