The Market Place

This market that is life
we all came to buy and sell
Though some are window shoppers
who go back home with nothing to tell

Stare that's all they do
at things good or bad
But can't quite pick one
their story so sad
They're the ones always on a fence
leaving butt prints on the sand of time
They stand for nothing 'n' fall for everything
Like the wrong interpretation of a mime

This market that is life
we all came to buy and sell
But everyone is a trader
ringing his own attention bell

Trade by barter is the only system
Which this market knows
Use what you have to get what you don't
is how this market flows

This market that is life
we all came to buy and sell
But we can't stay here forever
we have to go back from whence we fell

No one wants to leave voluntarily
so a guard is set on us
To escort us out when our time is due
And to the great beyond we must cross.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Well written succinct thoughts put in chronological order

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[barleygirl]

Ah yes, you are really hitting on some basic truths here, delivered in an imaginative way. Good use of the "market" analogy thru-out, as well as the "market is life" refrain that occurs every so often. I especially love the "butt prints in the sand" comment & I really relate to the "ringing his own bell" comment -- so often, everyone is craving attention, but nobody is giving any. The one line that doesn't feel right to me: "go back from whence we fell" (it seems a little like you're reaching for this rhyme). And finally, the ending is both gentle & harsh, the great escort out the door, love that concept.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for your review. I don't stretch for rhymes, the line ''...whence we fell'' is how I want it to be. I believe we all came from somewhere up there, so in another way, we fell from there. Thanks again.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for your review. I don't stretch for rhymes, the line ''...whence we fell'' is how I want it to be. I believe we all came from somewhere up there, so in another way, we fell from there. Thanks again.

[Archos]

A really cool piece. I didn't expect such depth after reading the first few verses, but the more the rest of the poem hit me.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks, I appreciate the review