THE BEAUTY OF MY NIGHTMARES THE BEAUTY OF MY DREAMS

I looked to my right 'n' caught you staring at me
your gaze you can't quite avert
But there's no place I'd rather be
your attention to me I want nothing to divert

My legs seemed to develop a mind of their own
as towards you by them I'm led
A beauty in a crowded room standing all alone
Immediately I knew my broken heart would mend

I saw your smile as I got closer
Daring, bold and as bright as daylight
So warm it was it could melt butter
Like a candle wax which burn at night

Your eyes twinkled like the stars in the night sky
Your hands waving at me as if in appreciation
In my stomach I felt flutters, think it's a butterfly
I said to my self a silent ''congratulations''

I knew I've found the one and I want no another
Indeed you must be a goddess
You hair flowed like a sea wave over your shoulder
I felt unworthy to be in your presence

Disappointment crashed on me like jingle bells
All is never as it seems
For your waving and smiling was for someone else
But you became the beauty of my nightmares, the beauty of my dreams

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Oooooh! I was all set up in this one, expecting the same thing the narrator was so longingly expecting, but then the whole expectation was dashed! Very good twist. You led me astray all the way, before throwing out the disappointing conclusion to this hopefulness. Your words painted every bit the inner fluttering of this timid-yet-brave narrator, loved your use of stomach-butterfly in a slightly different way than expected. Many excellent descriptions based on analogies from nature -- a great way to show the way it feels.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you again for your continuous support of my work. I started this poem with no idea of what I was writing(okay I start most of my poems like that) I know they say "begin with the end in mind" but it doesn't work that way for me; I just lace up my boots, carry my traveling bag and just jump outta the house with no destination in mind for it is the journey that I find fun.....wait, what am I talking about again?

[barleygirl]

I very rarely know where I'm going when I start a poem or story. Back in the old days when I was a control freak, I wanted to have every idea nailed down in my mind before I started writing. Therefore, I never started writing! It has been one of my biggest accomplishments, to learn to come to the page with a vague idea & an open mind! *smile*

[His]

This is really powerful and full of emotion! I love it :)

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you for giving me a feedback

[His]

No problem Jerrs

[His]

Imma say this again I love this poem it's so beautiful and tragic at the same time. And don't worry Jerrs you'll find your girl ^_^ you're amazing and sweet and cute and talented. Any girl would be lucky to have you.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Hahaha you and your words, thank you