The Most Beautiful Things

Through nails and thorns did I tread
My clothes got torn but again I mend
For I was journeying to a place where great challenges I met
And my journey destination, was the centre of the earth
Through mountains and hills did I climb
Needed extraordinary strength to keep sane my mind
The most beautiful things were what I was going in search for
I was told they are not many, they are just four
But what could they be? Even I had no idea
Could they be diamonds, rubies, gold and sapphire?
Through oceans and lakes did I surf
I searched to the south, I searched every curve
No stone leave not I unturned
Not once did I wane, for my will was strong
Through hailstorms and tornados did I search
For the the most beautiful things could be in any catch
The first I found was a chest filled with gold
But I have seen you before, and now I know you're not my goal
The most beautiful things'll be what I'm yet to see
Like the planets I've heard about or the bottom of the sea
So I continued my search for things I knew not
I Found diamonds on my way, and the Arkenstone for which Smog fought
Could this be the most beautiful things which I had always dreamed?
But why do I still feel empty like a hole that needs to be filled?
I searched everywhere, even the devil's snare I searched
My strength failed me and I gave up, for I did meet my match
Now I realise, where on my death bed I lay
surrounded by family, and the serenity of may
The most beautiful things which I had all this years seeeked
Has always been beside me, has always been at my keep
Four things they are, and now I've found them all
Happiness, Family, Peace and Love
Sweet they are, just like honey, you find them and your life shall be rid of mess
They can't be bought, not with money, for the most beautiful things, are always priceless.

Reviews

[Lord of mad men]

very well done i loved it very much! happiness it hard to gain but yet even harder to keep. it is one of life great things yet many feel so little and fewer give it to others. it is a great thing to find some that makes you happy i have and i hope everyone else does too.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks you, I appreciate it, I'll try to look up some of your writings, thanks again.

[His]

I had all this years seeeked

Is the only seeked* that's the only thing I found wrong. This is really good though and I love the meaning in it. Of course you can chase happiness but it will always slip from your reach.

[RJ]

this is really good!!! :D

[barleygirl]

I love this message & you've expressed it well. I like the way you describe the torturous search, always looking & wondering, guessing what the treasures might be. I love the way the narrator finds the "usual" treasures, but still feels unsatisfied -- a great analogy for life. And, as happens often in life, a person doesn't discover the riches were always there, all along the way . . . not realizing this until on one's deathbed. A cautionary tale to not wait until it's too late. This is a universal message told with fresh imagery & imagination.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you so much for your kind, thoughtful and spot on review. I appreciate it.

[𝐋.𝐂.]

I really like your way of writing poems, "story withing the poem, poem within the story"
It makes the tone, the speed, the temple very different when reading.

The greatest things are just right beside us, yet we always ignore and instead go on journeys to find what we think the true "beautiful things". In the end, we're wrong, I totally agree!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for taking time to read and review, I appreciate it. Writing poems and stories within each other is something I just can't help, and I'm glad you like my writing pattern. Most times we tend to lose diamonds while we were collecting stones.