From my bedroom window

Her smile has the ability to pause time
Her face so angelic, so divine
Her beauty is like the scent of the purest wine
Her voice so sweet, like a fine music line

Her eyes are like diamonds in the morning sun
With full set teeth like the stalk of a healthy corn
From her lovely gaze you're never tempted to run
Her palms so soft like that of a new born

From my bedroom window I watch her pass by
Shining so bright like a star in the night sky
Her name is like a Whisper without wings she makes you fly
Perhaps someday she'll know my name, if I build the courage to say ''Hi''

Reviews

[R.M.C]

This is a great piece. Your lovely descriptions are simply sublime. The poem speaks to all of the people in the world who have gazed wishfully upon someone who they are head over heels with but who don't even know their name or even acknowledge their existence in return. It truly is a lovely piece and makes me feel sympathetic to all of those in a similar situation. Well done.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.

[Lord of mad men]

This woderful. just great i really enjoyed reading this. it made me thing of the one i hold so close to my heart. which always makes me happy. thank you for that and sharing this with us. they way you speak of the person is just lovely and shows how much you care for them. the descriptions you use are magnificent and come from your heart. This great piece speaks to everyone who has some they yorn to speak to or have already and still get the feelings as if they just met once more. the ones how wish to speak but do not know how. hello seems so simple yet for many it is hard to say to one they look apon with affection from afar or close. this spiece is very good. you did a wonderful job. keep on writing. this is very well done. thank you so very much for sharing this piece on this site.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you so much for the review, you were spot on.

[Whisper]

It's beautiful.....and very creative.....

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A very lovely poem! Beautiful rhyme here, Jerry!

Very impressive imagery and lush visuals. This really puts the reader inside your bedroom, looking out on the object of your affection.
A very romantic streak is illustrated throughout this piece, a trait to be admired.
Very Good work!

[barleygirl]

I could feel the way an onlooking person, completely smitten, would see this angelic being, desired, admired, but being too shy to reach out & turn the fantasy into reality. Often, the fantasy is better than the reality, especially being viewed in such terms of perfection, as in your gentle words. Very good poetic construction, as well as an interesting message.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you again for your continuous support...ma'am:).

[Mary Helda]

Boy oh boy!!!! she is one breathtaking girl...maybe you should walk upto her and say hi. ..trust me,if you tell her these words,,,she won't be able to refrain her self from being your friend or even more..*wink*

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[Mary Helda]

You are welcome:-)

[Phillip Francis]

Great writing. Thank you for sharing.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you for taking your time to read and review