The city of pride

We do not know where they come from
We do not know where they have gone
It was in the morning, when we heard a loud drum
Then appeared a ship that blocked out the sun
With it's mighty wings and hum of power
Like the eagles kings, up it soars
It's monstrosity we saw with our eyes
So covered with scars of battles fought
But what we failed to realise
Is the doom this ship has brought
Our awe was turned to fright, when suddenly began a downpour
The sky turned to fiery light, for it didn't rain water but fire balls
Skyscrapers were humbled, and the ground their peak did sweep
Mighty mansions tumbled, consumed by fire and lost it's keep
People got burned and crushed, and cries turned to a continuous weep
Our crafts got twated and squashed, like a lousy fly disturbing sleep
Where are the mighty men of the world? Who radiated with pride and hate
Inside caves they have crawled, trying to avoid the worse fate
Suddenly the downpour ceased, and from the sky the ship disappeared
Time seemed to have freezed, as our land cried bitter tears
We used to be powerful and great, our wrath no one could withstand
We were really proud and fueled with hate, our ways no one understands
We wanted to build mighty towers, so high it'll reach the sky
We wanted to be gods with powers, without wings we wanted to fly
We destroy other nations, we oppress then make them cry
We said we were almighty, now we've seen that's just a lie
We were boastful of our nectar producing trees, for that, us, other nations serve
By our pride we were blinded and always carefree, in gold our name was carved
Now our smoke rise to the air, to mark our shameful defeat
The people now tremble in fear, what happened to our tongues of deceit
Our enemies now laugh and mock, the once great city of pride
We were rich we had money in bulk, but wretchedness rests in our mind
We do not know where they come from
We do not know where they have gone
Some will say they are a wretched scum, and deserve a big boot to the bum
But a message they've come to pass across, to whoever isn't too deaf to hear
''Do away with your pride'' they've told us, ''And let your name become The city of care''
Rubles are our structures that were enormous
Now we know that pride is poisonous
But again we shall rebuild, and one day get back our greatness
Not with deceit if we could, but by being humble and with patience
For now we know there's one up there, who watches everything we do
Don't think you're greater but fear, or this fate shall befall you too.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This poem is very well crafted! I can see how it's a testimony to: "pride cometh before a fall" . . . What I love the most is the way you've taken the time to show us many details that paint this picture. Normally, I'm not too keen on repetition, but you've done it very effectively with this sequence of lines: "We used to be . . . " & "We were really proud . . . " & "We wanted to build . . . " all the way to "We said we were almighty . . . " . . . This set of lines is the most powerful part of your poem. It really SINGS as it describes the way we get caught up in our own foolish pride. The tone of your writing sounds high-falutin' just like we feel when we're all puffed up over ourselves. This is a very excellent write.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you so so much for your wonderful review. I wanted to write a poem about an invasion. As I was writing, an idea came to mind that, why don't I give it a deeper meaning, which I did, but it took a big blow out of me. Thanks again, for reading and reviewing.

[Archos]

A message that needs to bre heard nowadays, when arrogance rules us. Let's hope they teach their lesson and don't slip back into their arrogance.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for your understanding review. I'm sure the've learnt their lesson and will pass it on to others.

[Dead]

It's really good.... As always

[Jerryyoung1z]

Lol thanks