Life

Life is a race
that nobody wins
You might think it's
Stable
But life always spins


Life is a game
Every body wanna
Play
Don't think you're in
Charge
You can't have your way


Life is a place
A whole lot of space
room for every one
safe your face


Life is a tree
A whole lot of branches
It's a pool of risk
Take your chances


Just like an illusion
Life is a dream
Life is a mystery
Flows like an endless stream


Life could be magical
Sometimes
It could be cruel
Life could be anything

But nothing without YOU!!

Reviews

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A superb write, Jerry.

This reads very swiftly, like a drink going down the throat on a very hot day! It is very difficult to achieve such pace and rhythm in a poem, and you have done that extremely well here.
Life is all that you have described here. It is quite the conundrum; so full of many hidden meanings, open truths, and twists like an emotional tornado.
This is a very good poem. Rhymes are excellent. Nicely Done!

[Une coccinelle]

I noticed you comment that you wrote this with someone in mind. Some of my best poems were inspired by other people...wanting to share a little hope or inspiration. I really like you poem!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review, I appreciate it.....most of my writings is centred on this person.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very true words my friend. Life is good and bad day. We must go forward with a hopeful heart and mind. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Archos]

Short, simple, beautiful. I like the optimism (realism, really) of this poem.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Wrote it with someone in mind

[Jerryyoung1z]

Wrote it with someone in mind

[Archos]

I see, makes sense ;)

[Jerryyoung1z]

Lol yeah:)

[Whisper]

Everything you said is true, I like the rhymes, keep up the good work =^-^=

[Jerryyoung1z]

Yay! Thanks

[barleygirl]

This poem is hitting on all cylinders & that's rare. I love the message, I love the rhyme, I love the rhythm, & I love that it's approachable & friendly & welcoming. Most of all, I think your rhythm is superb. It could be a rap song. When I write poetry, I find rhythm to be the most challenging. People critique me on my rhythm all the time. That's why I especially love the easy beat of this jig. Thanks for sharing.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Yay!! Thanks so so much for your positive review. It was orginally a song I wrote, then I tweeked it a bit and to pass as a poem. Thanks again:-)

[barleygirl]

I wish you had more things posted (((HUGS)))

[Jerryyoung1z]

I'm currently writing a new poem, I title it. . .err, still working on that. . .aha!! That's it, I'll title it "Invasion"

[barleygirl]

Nuttin' like a little synergy! Looking forward to reading when your ready!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Okay, thanks:-)

[Peyton Light]

Cool poem :) It makes for quite an enjoyable read :)

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks:-) for the review.