Florida

A day so warm and so bright,
is nice after a cold night.
For the Florida sunshine
is so warm and really fine.

The palm leaves are still so green,
and the air so fresh and clean.
I do not miss snow at all.
I would rather have rainfall.

In the whole land of the free
Florida:  the place to be.

Reviews

[M.P.]

I can say this rolls of the tounge fairly well, but I would like more different images of Florida, ones that might intrigue the reader more. Can can be achieved by the use of more surprising and unusual combinations of nouns and adjectives. I imagine there must be more you want to say about Florida.

The first two lines makes me question; are you trying to say that Flordia has cold nights, or is this just a general statement, that a warm day is enjoyable after a cold night? This makes me think more of a desert than anything else! I like how you call the sunshine 'fine' but I think there are more words that could possibly rhyme with sunshine.