Butcher Bird

Simulation, brash, aloft, rebel, impale.

High aloft what is it I see
dripping something onto me
like a simulation of Christ's nail
now upon which you did impale

your namesake is less brash than you
happy with beetles and frogs it slew
but something darker does you drive
a rebel slaying all alive

Church steeples high you cherish best
see bodies perched high stiff at rest
the birds put creatures on barbed wire
you place your bigger prey much higher

I've written of you many times
some wee stories some small rhymes
You share a bird name both alike
the Buthcher Bird we know as Shrike

Author's Note

This is about the serial killer poems, mixed in with this challenge here for fun. Maybe will repost the stories at one of Judy's sites X

Reviews

[Judy Ponceby]

Most excellent, and I hope you do post it at both sites :) Excellent use of the words to :) I will have to read up on this Shrike fella. Would love to have you post a pic of one in the daily observation area at Nature's Kingdom :) Excellent rhyme scheme too :)

[ice]

The poem is perfectly clear...The serial killer and Loggerhead are a good match for a poem topic. Welldone, and a good use of the words.
I know the bird, but never have known a serial kil

"the birds put creatures on barbed wire"

I have seen this in August, after the second cutting of hay..
On spurs on barbed wire, the butcherbirds hang their prey.
Coming back to dine later, their prey is not wasted;
Unlike the serial killer who leaves bodies to rot, where they lay.

[Kira]

I understand this was for a contest, but you tried too hard to get those words and rhymes in there, and the poem made next to no sense. also, in the last line, you misspell butcher. 2/10.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

I like it, look forward to more reposts ; )