That Golden Empty Box

That Golden Empty Box 

A golden box

Sits upon my desk

It takes up dust

 But I have no regrets

A star shaped box

With no purpose at all 

A golden box

That seems to enthral

Well that same box

Holds a meaning to me

It's what I can't have

Fruit of the poisonous tree 

They say life is a box of chocolates

What if that box is empty inside

That box may be of a past

But the past is how I hide

I hide behind the walls 

I've so carefully assembled

Just how my secrets hide inside that box

As my heart resembled 

I pass by that box everyday 

Although It brings me to tears

It's brings back memories of a time

I thought I had no fears

I thought I had nothing to fear

You'd keep me safe from the outside

By who really knew the threat was near

Standing graciously by my side

You broke me with a few words

They hit me hard like rocks

Now I only have a few good memories

One being that golden empty box

I can't get rid of it

No matter how hard I try

Because that box made me smile

Even though I now cry

So I keep that old box

From that very first day

Because it reminds me of my happiness

That you took away

-Jennifer Kurack

Reviews

[Temerity]

Hey Jennifer! You have some really nice lines here, places where you really glean a sense of sentimentality and (perhaps painful) nostalgia. I would have liked to see a more consistent rhythm, because there are definitely places where the excess syllables weaken the resonance of the actual words, but overall, you do a very eloquent job of describing things in a simple, coherent, and emotional way. I really enjoyed reading this; it holds a lot of intrigue as to the box's history.

Keep writing, and best wishes. xxx

[Jennifer K]

Thank you I will try to work on that for the future!

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid box and poem. Thank you for penning...:).....................

[Jennifer K]

thank you for reviewing!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).............

[Shaquana Adams]

You'd keep me safe from the outside
By who really knew the threat was near
Standing graciously by my side

These lines really resonated with me. I love this poem. Definitely faving it! :)

[Jennifer K]

thank you! I really appreciate it.

[PurpleQuartz]

This has a brilliant flow to it!! Wonderful write!

[Jennifer K]

thank you so much!

[Devesh]

I love the mataphors you used in the poem! Personal experiences are especially hard to share because you have to tell the reader just enough..your poem did that job beautifully. Thanks for sharing! =)

[Devesh]

I just saw your bio line and read that you're just 15...I thought this was written by a much older person. Impressive understanding, for someone your age..I still don't comprehend these things :P

[Jennifer K]

Haha thank you for taking the time to review my work! I appreciate it!!!!

[Devesh]

You're most welcome! =)