Perfect

 

Tears

 

lining the pockets

 

of the case that I fold into

 

wishing to be sent

 

someplace else.

 

No stamps nor gold

 

can get me there

 

alas

 

I walk the journey

 

without flight.

 

My legs may be wrong

 

but God will right them

 

as He leaves an imprint

 

above my mouth.

 

Whispering shhhh

 

taming my spirit

 

and drying the rain

 

from the storms

 

taking my body rocking.

 

Paying life's debts

 

with soul's money

 

adding,

 

subtracting

 

all sums of sin.

 

I am not perfect

 

came here not perfect

 

honesty

 

isn't always perfect.

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

of the case that I fold into
wishing to be sent
someplace else.
No stamps nor gold
can get me there

Paying life's debts
with soul's money

great metaphor and use of language here. love the tone, and you end with a strong notion "honesty isn't always perfect" how true.. honesty can be ugly. Very passionate!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Beautiful words metaphors and the message is wonderful.. love your poems , Jenny..

Chloe
xoxo

[Brette Medb]

Honesty isn't always perfect... great lines and so true! Many people say they want honesty but when they get it they hate it... wonderful write.

Brette

[shortcake34]

I have to stop what I am doing when I see the word "perfect". This time I was not alienated from it. Very nice stop.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The word 'perfect' comes from the Latin 'perfectus', which in turn is derived from 'perficio', meaning; 'to finish or bring to a conclusion'. Applied to one's life, the only perfect certainty we have, is the knowledge of it ending at some predestined point in time.

I found myself thinking, whilst reading through your exquisite composition, an awareness of my inadequacies and the price paid for not correcting or asking forgiveness to address these issues.

Writing that provoke such stimulus of thought must be applauded! Well done!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Dezaraye]

This is a beautiful and profound piece. I love the short lines and the line breaks between each, it makes this piece seem more thoughtful and less tense. Very nicely done.

[BrightEyes]

amazing word choices here...some fantastic phrases. "paying life's debts; with soul's money" but my favorite has to be, "honesty isn't always perfect.". while I love this piece; it seems to come from a dark place, so I hope sunlight filters inside; lifting you out.

*hugs*

laura

[Rain]

honesty
isn't always perfect.

Very profound. I sense such inner turmoil in this piece. You will survive. Very emotional piece. Rain..

[SweetFly]

When someone makes you feel bad there is always God to right everything. I want to tell you Jenny. You are very special and care and give more than most could ever. Your words are merely touching the surface of who you are and how you feel. God knows you, I know you and others who have the opportunity to know you as we do will never stand against you . You take the high road always. You try with patience and get misunderstood. Many of us do. That is OK.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I get the sense that this is what it will be like when I finally pass on...There's something rather honest in this piece, and you're right...honesty isn't always perfection, but what is in the world?

This is a rather quiet and somber piece from you...

[Blackbirdsong]

That last line really just resonates. Honesty isn't always perfect. Trying to be a good person is often seen as weakness by some, when in truth honesty and goodness take a lot more strength than their opposites. Especially to show goodness and honesty when it isn't easy, but easier to do other things. That shows the depth of a person and separates the adults from the children.

Well needless to say you got me thinking here. Love this one Jenny.