Asunder

 

 

When our souls collided
how they created such a glow
of bursts and breaks;
lightning.

Stars exploding in the sky.

Winds like songs of yesterday
blow north, moving on,
quietly remembering;
Rain.

Pouring over hidden hearts.

Reviews

[Le' Pugh']

It's what we up North call the "Aurora Bear-ealis" or the Northern Lights.
I was transplanted there after an unfortunate incident with some campers and a picnic basket, but I don't wanna go there right now (that's one Boo-Boo I'd like to forget).

Two hearts of such a kindred spirit that nature itself seems to get involved in the festivities. "Winds like songs of yesterday blow north, moving on... quietly remembering; Rain."

Then to see that kind of love gone.

You're somethin' else, you know? Quite the poet.

Simply, Le'

[E. M. Murren]

My first reaction... Sigh. LOL This was exquisite. You are so gifted. Really lovely work.

[Shelly Wiseberg]

Yes it is true you are a very talented writer, with lovely words of asunder,Shelly

[Kyle A. Smith]

You're such a good writer..
Souls colliding, I love picturing that.

Yet hmm..it makes me wonder.

[Michelle Mead]

This really comes alive with that incredible photo. I have to say, I am a bit biased because I LOVE spare poetry, and this is beautiful and right on target that way, love it.

[The Elder Pine]

This piece not only speaks on a human level, but a cosmic level. The northern lights are created by a similar process. The suns light is directed toward the poles, which comes in contact with atmospheric molecules and reflects off of them causing little bursts of light and that is what causes the lights. That said this process could be related to that of human relationships. Well written, and well done.

[Adam Greenfield]

I love these short, quick bursts of emotion in words. They hit home and leave, like a tornado. This is certainly no exception. "Pouring over hidden hearts" is such a descriptive line and yet still there is meaning behind the meaning. Way to create that dichotomy. Hell of a write, Jenny, hell of a write.

[SM Davis]

Beautiful images! Well done.

[Chiquita]

Beautiful. No more needs to be said.

[Ed Hart]

well, i was going to say some this and that about your words here, but then i read your other praisers (which is my want) and my thoughts would only echo from the canyon walls repeating endlessly those very words i love to hear...much respect, Ed

[Dead Angel]

i love your writings, they never cease to amaze me. your description and metaphors were beautiful, great job! :)