Friend...

 

Friend, relax, sit on my shoulders awhile,
outline geese's V shaped unity with your finger...

 

Count all the raindrops that fall today,
save some for tasting on a sunny day.

 

Breathe the winds of change inside,
see the coming and going of tides.

 

For today is just one pebble in the sand,
and tomorrow is for sea shells smiling there...

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Aww, nice Poem. I like the simplicity and the relaxing invitation to a friend. All too often we don't stop to smell the roses and this is what your poem felt like to me, like stopping and remembering the simpler things in life.

Very cool writing.

Also, I want to thank you for taking the time to stop by my poem "complacent woman" - I appreciate your kind thoughts and words.

[James Watts]

Breathe the winds of change inside,
see the coming and going of tides.

I liked the above...loved the way you worded it. Loved the piece in general...but that stuck out to me...nice work.

[Sara Henry Heistand]

Aw, a hippie write. :}

I see Woodstock. I dunno. I just can't shake it. The earthy atmosphere, the soothing rhythm of (perhaps?) a guitar, relaxing (with a little help from my friends?), the peace-sign reflected in nature... The last couplet summed it up for me.

For today is just one pebble in the sand,
and tomorrow is for sea shells smiling there...

That's such a prolific ending. It's a perfect ending. I love your short and sweet stuff, Jenny. :} "[T]oday is just one pebble in the sand" has such a huge effect on me. "[T]oday" is one big day, in comparison to the other grains of sand, but there are hundreds of days. Thousands of days. And we assume there'll always be more.

[Emily B]

Calming and peaceful. It's such a beautiful scene as two people do what friends do. Thanks for sending this.

[Dezaraye]

Count all the raindrops that fall today,
save some for tasting on a sunny day.

My favorite lines. :) This is such a beautiful write. I love the easy going, wistful feel about it.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I do like these writes of yours Jenny...keep spinnin em lovely,and Ill keep reading them!

[R J Askew]

like the notions in the first and fourth verses, especially the first verse. I gather the lead goose does the most work and the others get a minor slipstream benefit...and that they take it in turns to lead the V.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A lovely write, and the photo and the blue font caught my eyes, nice work.

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

lovely with my morning coffee...good morning!
great work as usual Jenny, see ya thursday!

[SweetFly]

The simplicity of this poem is just like life. It can be simple or complex, the choice is up to the person or persons. There will be days bad that need a friend's shoulder, but they should never be spent in vain.