Vulnerabilities

The sky is black and blue,

hanging from a thread.

The twine is invisible,

as are the bruises.

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The metaphorical use of colours to express despondency, defencelessness, and emotional despair in one's life, with so few words, is both sad and creative. An excellent composition.

If you're up to a not to serious challenge, try the colour test @ www.colorquiz.com

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[E. M. Murren]

Wow... that's all I can think now... Wow. LOL Such a stunning work... Really powerful.

[George Love]

Such a great work, very short, very quick to hit and make your points!

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

short sweet and an ocean of emotions. well done it says so much without saying much at all.

windstorm

[The Elder Pine]

Wonderful metaphor, so full of sorrow and pain...I can identify in a similar way I think...

[Solst Rapture]

I noticed this in my read request box and after mentioning vulnerability in my last review, I couldn't help but read it. It was surprisingly brief, initially, until the colour doused my thoughts and squandered my mood and then the last line framed the melancholy and abused vulnerability into a context that left a cold shiver run down my shins.

It could have been a coincidence of course.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

wow this was pretty deep... awesome job.

[Imperfection]

A mere four lines but the effect is so powerful.

Interesting way to use the colors.

[Raef C. Boylan]

I like the idea of the sky hanging on an invisible thread (as scary as it is lol) - and the comparison to mental (I'm assuming) bruises (although maybe also real and physical, as in the past or something).

Brief, but complete.
Nice piece.

Thanks for sharing it.

[Sara Henry Heistand]

I'm reveling in the emotions here; at least theoretically. I mean, this is obviously a sad piece. I think that the bluntness in the last line is extremely profound in its "i'mnotokay, but i'll live, i guess." I like the image of a thatched sky tying down the world, like the bruises are tying back some hearty feelings as well. So very powerful for something so short. :)

[Jack of Aces]

really pretty poem
I don't have enough information to determine the meaning, nor am i deep enough to interpret it as i see others have done so nicely :)
and i would hate to presume something innacurate :)
luv the colors and I feel kind of sorrowful at the end, with the word "bruises" which can only lead me to the obvious
but somehow, i think this is more than just the obvious.