Beautiful, Lovely

How beautiful the sight,
the sun,
peering through my blue windows.
A delicate delight,
such fun,
chasing away the shadows.




How lovely the sound,
the moon,
dropping in on my day.
Just grazing the ground,
sweet tune,
singing my cares away. 
 

Reviews

[aponijose]

I have to agree with Sue; the piece is delightful. But its Coldplay's Clock's delightful, not uhm... well... Katelyn Tarver's Wonderful Crazy delightful so... yes... I don't think that that's bad.

I'm a big fan of personifications so I'm sure you could understand the appeal of your piece to me. I find it endearing in a sense. It gives the piece a clever and afflicting power to converse with the writer as if the elements placed in the piece - the moon, the sun, etc - was theirs.

And for that, I commend you.

[Laura E. Aranda]

I didn't want the poem to be over. It was excellent. Thank you for sharing with me. I have to say this is the very favorite of my genre...I love nature poems and mingled with romance and peace is awesome! Take care.

[SweetFly]

Your unique choice in rhyme scheme is very impressive. The ideas put behind them are even more so.

[Gordon Greene]

Personify, personify personify!

Make me feel at home with the moon and the sun... I am not by any stretch of the imagination an environmentalist and you make me want to hold onto creation like a long-lost friend.

Gotta go... I hear the moon singing my name!

Gordon

[Julian]

I am loving your dabble with rhyme here Jenny. I have read this over and over and it gets better each time.Beautifully subtle. A fave! Julian

[Adam Greenfield]

I need to read this piece every night when I get home from work. I got such a comforting, peaceful feeling in my chest when I read this. Great flow. Awesome write, Jenny.

[Rain]

Jenny..
I don't over analize, or over complicate. A writer writes a piece, they hope you get something from it.. It's like trying to analize Dylan's "Subterranian Love Sick Blues"..it can't be done. You either feel it and like it, or not. I did feel it. I did like it. Rain..

[Fran Marie]

How lovely this write~ A real feel good poem~I Enjoyed this delightful piece~Fran Marie

[Phill Oz O'fee]

This is refreshing; a delightful expression of poetising the natures of both our sun and moon.

Excellent creative composition, with first-class structured stanzas.

Well done!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[The Poor Man's Poet]

I like it when poets write poetry for the Art of it.
this is very nice Thanks for sharing it with me.

[Emily B]

delicate and lovely as fine old lace. . .