Somewhere In Time

 

 

You will never see mine eyes

as they rain on porcelain pendulums

 

Nor will you see mine breasts rise and fall,

in sighs of remembrance

 

Asking the night tide and sidereal day

 

"How could this be

why has He left me to the blast?"

 

I will never hear an echo

whether in hums or outcries to comfort

 

Nor will I acquire and accept

dawn's final good-bye from my sky

 

Just the silence and me

with the stars as my scars chanting

 

"What world is this, that spins

and lives without my one true love?"

 

My soul is benumbed

from winds blowing me invisible

 

But my heart is heated

from coals of cherished moments

 

As I speak to the moon

and its eye of never ending light

 

"I remember somewhere in time...

         .........you loved me"

Reviews

[Gordon Greene]

I can't help but see Christopher Reeves face as he finds the penny in his pocket and looks in disbelief as Jane Seymour fades into oblivion... utter desperation at the thought of separation as I read:

"What world is this, that spins
and lives without my one true love?"

My soul is benumbed
from winds blowing me invisible

But my heart is heated
from fires of cherished moments

As I speak to the moon
and its eye of never ending light

"I remember somewhere in time...
.........you loved me"

These lines could live a life of their own. This is a work to cherish... Gordon

[E. M. Murren]

You write with such grace. I keep saying that, but it is true. It reads like fine lace... intertwined until beauty of form glows incandescently. Really fine work.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Oh, it is so difficult to love and lose!

""I remember somewhere in time...
.........you loved me""

Great line - at some point there was love. But, all that is left now is the smouldering embers of passion once known. Great write! I really like the two line stanzas. It maintains a constant state of energy.

-Gabe

[The Elder Pine]

It is an awful feeling to be turned away by someone you love. The way you wrote this piece almost matches the journey taken from the time of live to the moment feelings changed, wonderful piece.

[Heart Of A Wolf]

Aw... Beautiful work here. I also have wondered before how the world could continue revolving while my mind, body and soul seemed crashed. But, as i look back, perhaps that is the worlds way of helping us to coup and to heal.

[Dead Angel]

such a sad story of how she loved someone who cast her aside. the words were beautiful and so was the imagery you created! great job! :)

[Laura E. Aranda]

so sad....how she cherished those memories for the one who shunned her....i love the way you write...take care my new friend....cheers,lea

[Alex]

What world is this, that spins
and lives without my one true love?"


mine sadly at the moment ,thank you for sharing

[Antony]

Jenny the chosen words and the sorrow behind them make this poem a heartfelt piece of you, your last line sums up your feelings of never being able to recapture this love again. This is excellent.
Tony

[Lionel Braud]

I like the stillness of time in this poem, the imagery and subtleties give the impression of no time.

You will never see mine eyes
as they rain on porcelain pendulums

great lines in here too.

Just the silence and me
with the stars as my scars chanting

interesting word order too. great visuals and use of pantomines, astrological and seasonal images.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

This kicks...The sadness is there, and yet, I feel that you are moving on, trying to forget the reason for the sadness...the flow was awesome, and the words were great!
Thank you so much for sharing this with me, I really like this write of yours!