The Rain

Rain sings on street side puddles

everywhere it falls clear as an empty jar.

The rain tells things we long to know:

Is there hope for our marriage?

 

In school, I once wrote a letter

to someone I hadn’t met

a little undiscovered star this letter

Illuminating my drawer even

veiled by small neatly folded tees

It’s what you wanted, isn’t it?

See, the rain reminds us of things, too.

 

Outside, crape myrtles froth

bright pink against a grey sky,

an elderly woman turns the thin page

of her book at a bus stop.

the stoplight light teeters.

 

I know what you long for

the rains hums. Blizzard of leaves

falling to the street.

The beginning.

Wrens chasing one another

in the evening sky.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

There may be a deeper meaning here that only reader and muse know but as far as relationships go, the chase or the hunt is exciting, for some more than the feast, but for others who truly love one another it becomes a slower steady pace, not always filled with excitement of something new, the 'firsts' but respect for the bond you have built over time.

[JenniferMarie]

Very true. We are best friends, but doesn't mean there isn't work to have the spark going. I'm willing to work on it but after 8 years I have moments where I feel this way. Thank you for your comment. I appreciate it.

[Matching Socks]

Oh I hear ya! I get those too! :-)
I get it...

[JenniferMarie]

relationships :-/ I was having a sad moment :) I do appreciate your comment.

[Vishuddha]

An illuminating write. I love the rain but have never thought about how much it might know. I love how your poem moved on, out into the world beyond the rain. A fresh and vivid piece.

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much Vishuddha. I appreciate your comment.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautifully written with excellent imagery!

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much imagination101. I appreciate it and look forward to reading your work soon.
read moreThanks so much imagination101. I appreciate it and look forward to reading your work soon.

Best,
Jennifer

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Wórdsmíth]

You`ve recalled the memories off past & edited the scenes with rainy-words. There`s much depth behind your words... Wonderful write!

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much wordsmith. Great to hear a comment from ya.

Happy writing,
Jennifer

[Wórdsmíth]

Always an honor to write you such peaceful words of wisdom. Keep writing my friend! ;)

[Lydia Shutter]

The woman at the busstop knows what life is all about...turning the page and moving into the future. Everything starts with a tit for tat sort of race.....and it does seem that undiscovered stars shine brighter than the ones we have been gazing at for years. Still, truth is, stars never lose their brilliance and tomorrow CAN be better than today in any relationship if the people involved want it to be. Lots of metaphor and imagery in this one. I liked it. lydi**

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much Lydia. It's true what you have said here. There is hope and turning the page may be us turning the page to the old ways of doing things and into the new. We do evolve and our needs change and if communicated you resolve to make some little changes or remember the beginning and do things, get out more, gaze at one another more.

Thanks so much for your comment. I really appreciate it.

Happy writing,
Jen

[Tom]

A memorable metaphoric poem, brimming over with yearning conjecture!

Penned with alluring aplomb, splendid indeed!

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much Tom for your kind review. I appreciate you taking time to review. It's great to hear what fellow writes think.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

everything starts with the chase....then the autumn of the relationship, the leaves in a blizzard as well as the thoughts, the questions...will we last?
the answers are in the rain...maybe the elderly woman at the bus stop knows, she is turning the page...she sees.

this is a really intriguing poem...and leaves me pondering that bright pink against the grey sky, and what tomorrow will bring.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jacob. I really appreciate your comment. It's true. So many questions in this life and wondering what tomorrow will bring. I believe it will bring blessings. All that we go through good, happy, struggles, doubt there is a little blessing in it all. For that I'm thankful :) Thank you again for your kind comment.