Like a Blue Heron

just a little free write. I should probably wait to post, but I post anyways.

Those long, lanky legs

standing like a gent.

Distant mystery, at the outskirts of a still pond,

How you scurry when I get too close. 

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

That was an adorable sweet and very natural poem to associate with how I also see nature, myself!! Short to the point, dreamy, and you leave a surprise of wanting to pull me into this place of peace and serenity. I Love it!! I feel like I was standing there with you, readying myself to take a picture before it ran out of view from us. Beautiful.... xoxo -Mark

[JenniferMarie]

Awww thanks so much! It was definitely from the heart, this poem :) Your review made my day so thank you.

[Michael G. Smith]

With tail feathers on his head. You captured him well or her. We have many of these here in Florida.

[Angi]

The imagery is crystal for me. I grew up in FL and I have the Blue Heron on my mind. I like the comparison to people. I can relate! I tend to scurry if things get too intense. I have no idea why I do this, I just do. Really like this short piece, Jennifer. Angi~

[JenniferMarie]

Me too. I do that. Maybe it's how we protect ourselves from getting hurt ... Thank you Angi. I like blue Herons and glad you were able to visualize them and liked this poem. Thank you for reviewing.

[Traci]

Free writes are oftentimes the best, glad you posted.

I tend to like the short, allegorical pieces as well. So much to ponder, in so few lines. Loved the third line, definitely a distant memory. Due to past hurts,fear, etc. we keep people at a safe distance, but once they get too close we scurry away, oftentimes vice versa. Why do blue herons scurry, that's the mystery. Nice job!

[JenniferMarie]

Do true what you've said. Past loves are a distant mystery that from time to time with think of. Yes, at times I scurry and other times it was maybe someone else that did. Thank you for your review.

[Peter H]

good read an write , lots of meaning in a very short piece :)

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Peter.

[Abhra]

Loved the line, "distant mystery,at the outskirts of a still pond". There is so much in this line. Two seemingly different things, stillness and mystery. Beautifully written.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Abhra. I appreciate your comment.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

great analogy to humans...they often scurry when we get too close...

someone can seem so graceful from a distance, but if we start to break down that distance, that person starts to get really awkward and scurries away..and remains a mystery...

why would he or she run?

i particularly like short, allegorical pieces like this.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jacob. They are a mystery and people sometimes do scurry when we get too close. You've read this poem well. I appreciate your review. Enjoy your day.