This Evening

Evening air, a peach haze, 
birds forget play for a while
seeking shelter deep in an oak tree, 
Union Pacific screeches by, 
then, silence.

Even the trees are still, 
the spinwheel ticks west then stops, 
I hurry my dog inside, 
as cool drops of rainfall.
  

Author's Note

workingout last line.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

It's just darling. It's my life. Your poem is my life. Every poem you have written, that I've read tonight, feels like I'm visiting my day that has just started to wind down.... Gorgeous scents and feeling safe at home. My version of "Home sweet Home" is written into your poem with what seems like ease. : ) Having a space above and below your poem would have certainly made this poem much more special where I could focus my eyes on the poem without the distraction of links, copyright, and title of the poem. : ) Lovely poem. xoxo -Mark

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you. I appreciate your comment. :)

[A.J.]

simplicity at its finest ;)

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you :)

[Will Neill]

Weve all been there in a moment like that, that stillness just before the storm. Nice write.
Will

[Samuel Jack]

It had a Japanese feel to me, just plucking out little moments from life, nice and graceful. Good work

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Samuel. :) I appreciate your review.

Happy writing.

[Traci]

One thing that I love about your writing is you are able to convey so much in very few lines.
Being from California I know nothing about the weather you endure in Texas, only what I see/hear on the news. I think i'll stick to our earthquakes here, lol. Another well penned poem.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you. I know. I've never been in an earthquake. I do enjoy California and the weather. Our winters and spring are so nice, but 3 or 4 months of the year hot hot hot.

I appreciate your review. Its encouraging.

[Jack...]

I have seen these peach haze skies and know what comes along with them for the ride. You are very talented, I enjoyed this. I could smell the change in the air as I read. Very nice.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jack. You've honestly made my day. I hope to continue growing as a writer. I'm glad that you are able to see images and get a sense of environment through what I wrote here. Means a lot.

[Jack...]

Feel free to send me anything you would like me to read.

[JenniferMarie]

I appreciate that. I sure will.

[lee von cleef]

love the document ,putting a stamp on the day.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Lee :)

[Angi]

I know that peach haze well. (Grew up in FL, awesome storms, there) Love the air before a storm. This was really nice to read, something different! Angi~

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Angie. I know it's really cool. The whole atmosphere changes. It's interesting. The only thing missing here is the ocean. i don't know exactly how that looks before the storm. Thank you again for reading. I appreciate it.

Best,
Jennifer

[Angi]

Sometimes the air was more of a lemon haze. Before a hurricane was like that.

[JenniferMarie]

In Texas it's almost like a sunrise in the evening. Dusty orange or the peach haze. It's strangely calming.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the surprise ending...well for me it was...but then, it makes sense...all of the description points in that direction once we put it all together...

really nice feel to this one.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jacob. A quick write that I appreciate you taking the time to read. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

writing doesn't have to take hours or days to be good! this is.

[JenniferMarie]

As long as it's from the heart right? from the soul speaking truth. then, can it be so bad? I don't think so :) so happy to have found this site of fellow writers. Super cool.

[Sami Khalil]

A nice poem . I like the ending the most...:)

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Sami. I appreciate you taking time to read my poem. :) Means a lot for a writer in progress.

[JenniferMarie]

I meant it means a lot to a writer in progress (me)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Don't feel bad for we all all writers in progress with our uniqueness ...:)

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

:)