Homeless Rings

Green smooth porcelain sits
On the window sill
Of the past, presently
Providing temporary shelter
For the homeless and broken
Circles of gold and diamonds
Whisper our history
Calling me back
To sickness and health
Richer and poorer
Parted before death
I tried them on
In today's Dawn
Though they slid in place,
It's hard to admit
They no longer fit

Reviews

[Chris]

This was hard for me to read aloud - sensibly. Though I understood the subject and intent - the further I got, getting there took multiple initial and subsequent line re-reads as well as conscious deciding of what went together.

The phrasing was unique and a good play on and with reality.

[Jennesis]

Great feedback Chris, sometimes it make more sense in my mind. I appreciate it~
Jennesis

[....................]

I feel I am on the cusp of "parting before death" and this piece just tears a seam in my fragile heart - perhaps this is a foreshadowing. Will I soon be searching my own window sills? Thank you for this!

[Jennesis]

FT, glad you could get something out of it. Good luck with the cusp. It's scary, but in the end you trust yourself to fly.

[....................]

Thanks for the encouragement!

[Jennesis]

Sometimes the only available Transportation is a leap of faith. You might enjoy my piece Room if you're thinking about making a change, it's tough but good on the other side

[....................]

So true! I will check-out Room.

[Gee]

Very clever ,great read,be proud of this one

[Jennesis]

Thank you Gee! I appreciate it.

[Gee]

You're welcome

[Kelly Scheppers]

The pit-of-the stomach feeling is ever present here. You are shining, Jennesis...in just the three poems I have read of you, so far. I believe you to be in the path of brilliance.

I shall return to read more. Stay warm in Colorado!

[Jerome F Knox III pseudonym Nefarious J. Dorsey]

Thank you for lifting her up....

[Jennesis]

Thank you Kelly! You make me smile and give me a huge confidence boost. And also to you Rico. Your encouragement is priceless.

[stars are far]

That was so sad, your title held lots of meanings and the content is amazing, though it was sad ,since the divorce is a tough thought, i dont know how it feels never tried and thanks God my parents are happily married. so yeah you pictured it in a great way. well done Jennesis :)

[Jennesis]

Thank you for your kind words Star. I am grateful for your review.

[stars are far]

Always my pleasure :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Divorce is a painful word… I have been there myself… it can feel like your life has been a lie since you said I do.

[Jennesis]

Thank you Rock and Roll. It's definitely an adjustment for sure, yet I feel like it was a successful marriage that served its purpose. It's just still so sad.

[ANTO]

This is very poignant and beautifully sad Jennesis - the subtle twisting of the well-known wedding vows tells the reader all we need to know - illuminating the whole piece...bravo

[Jennesis]

Thanks ANTO! Your words are so kind. I so appreciate it.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

The opening was smooth like butter on the biscuits of truth rising up to meet your potential with a flakiness and flavor that is your own.

[Jennesis]

Thanks Rico, that review was quite tasty. It felt so sensual.

[Jerome F Knox III pseudonym Nefarious J. Dorsey]

Look at Kelly's response.... I told you that you are brilliant and your place is not only here but woven in the tapestry of American Poetry.....believe and fly....

[W R Stowe]

Love fits as we allow it to and though I'm on number 3 I take my vows very seriously now,perhaps because I was married in the church this time but I love my wife and half of my poems confirm it

[Jennesis]

Yes, we allow and chose don't we? Thanks for reading~

[W R Stowe]

your welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i pawned a couple of my old wedding rings, but the third time was so not a charm, i kept that in that temporary shelter as a reminder....love feels like it is homeless sometimes, yes it does.

[Jennesis]

It does feel homeless at times. ITs hard to know what to do with them...I think they will live there for a while. Reminders can be good... Thanks for reading Jacob! Take care today~