Snow Cone

Happiness is like a snow cone...
It's there one minute
And the next its gone.
It's so sweet
That you can't help but enjoy it.
When its gone,
Its gone.
Savor it while you can.

Reviews

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

So true. I would take and out it takes away from the flow. Just a suggestion.

[Jersey]

Short, sweet and to the point, yet it doesn't leave any room for a person to question beyond the obvious meaning. I like it, it's not very often that such a short poem is well written like you have here. Very lovely job

[Alexis]

simply beautiful and gets the point across:D

[Jaffa Forbes]

Nice poem and good analogy. Each moment, I guess, only lasts a moment, but some things are constantly renewed. Or something like that.

[Vartul]

Well, did you think of this at the ice cream shop? I love the happiness that flows through this piece. It brought a smile to my face. Your pieces always reflect your nature- cuddly, cute and immensely lovable. I'll give you a BIG HUG for this one. :)

Short, simple and kinda cute. You should try and elaborate though.

[SimplyDisastrous]

I agree. You did a good job of comparing happiness to a snow cone.

[P.S I Love You]

Agreed.. happiness comes with its bowl of sadness along with it.

[PaperHearts]

Cute! This was a really interesting concept. I liked the simplicity of this, and thought that it was interesting how you took such a complex idea yet described it in such a simple, almost child-like way. It made me think that maybe we put so much meaning onto happiness, despite the fact that essentially, it really is as simple as a snow cone. :) Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[The Analog Kid]

Real novel idea, yet a poignant comparison. Short, but powerful!