Darkened Romeo

Why has your soul blackened?

Why has your heart hardened?

What exactly has gone wrong?

And sadly you let it drag on for so long... 

I wish time could turn back,

when the skies were bright, not black. 

Now the ravens rule my skies... 

And the doves darkened by painful lies;

What is the wrong I have committed? 

But my life I have already submitted...

To you. 

Even though you haven't gotten a clue-

The truth is my heart stays the same.

But now, its in much more pain. 

Because of you.

My Darkened Romeo. 

My Fallen Angel. 

And I recall, you used to call me your Angel. 

Who was sweet and smelled of flowers. 

I believed your lies with much convincing. 

But now-those beliefs are drifting. 

I loved you, and I still do. 

No matter how wrong you may seem...

My heart will always belong to you. 

Keep it, if you will. 

Throw it, if you must. 

I shan't blame you. 

I blame myself.

For hurting you...

Providing such pain. 

And deceit.

So much hate in your heart. 

My Darkened Romeo... 

Where fore art thou light? 

Light up my life once more-and stay... 

I shan't forget the time we met-

When we embraced.

Professed our everlasting love.

When we kissed. 

When we cried.  

And laughed.

The joy is gone. 

The comfort-

Gone...

Oh My Darkened Romeo-

I beseech you...

Warm your heart once more-

And let the Rose Quartz take its place.

To remind you of a once magical love. 

A once beautiful beginning. 

The beginning of a future. 

A future so beautiful, dreams would envy. 

Oh My Darkened Romeo-

sit by me once more, with thy dented shoulder.

And let me rest. 

While you sing your lullaby with Angel's lips. 

And never say Good bye.

How Can I?...

Reviews

[HB]

Good concept, a bit long. Several of the beginning verses are superfluous, and the rhyming isn't necessary. Your slant rhymes are better. I would like to see this shaved down a bit. I like the last three verses best, along with the 5th stanza. Nice work.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Squee! Gosh, how I love this poem!! It's beautiful and very emotional..
I also love the title.. Romeo and Juliet is one of my favorite plays and thats why I wanted to read this. >.< Its wonderful and has a different side of Romeo. =D
Great write! Wonderful work!

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a beautiful write.. love the old English tossed in.. the early formed writing of Rythm and Rhyme.. this is a mixture of many forms and works well in this poem. Excellent job!

[Maggie]

My darkened Romeo...excellent name :D

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Aye a heartfelt write indeed! Splendid!
Light,
Siddartha

[Bloody Ceca]

I love this poem... It's deep.. Good Job!

[Ashley]

this was an incredible read. excellently written and beautifully expressed emotion.

[Jill Wallflower]

Love can go downhill so suddenly. I absolutely love this piece, it is so well written. Good Job.

[Pollyanna]

Sometimes, even true love can go wrong without warning. This piece is a wonderful representation of that fact . . . the love, hope and longing all shine through brilliantly.

[iamkim]

This is very nice. I love the way how you mixed it with old English. It's impressive! I couldn't write something like that...I guess. Thumbs up my friend!