Scratch That

 I love you 

I need you 

Scratch that

I want you 

 

To hold me

To kiss me

honestly 

To be on top of me 

 

Be nearer

Be charming 

Screw that

Be hot 

 

I'll be waiting 

I'll be pining 

Never mind that 

I'll be alone

 

Find me 

Take me 

More importantly 

Love me 

 

Reviews

[LdW]

This is immediate, great.

[Annie29]

Real.

[Antonio Valentino]

Few words, but tons of emotions.

I like that Jen!
Good stuff!

Antonio

[James Paulin]

Inner conversations get to the point in a hurry if whats in gets let out. I like that aspect of this poem the most. Your poem is about the heart and the heart of the matter.

[The Analog Kid]

A woman. What she wants builds--and then changes. "You know how complex women are." She's confused by the passion, then finally admits that love is paramont even though she asks to be ravaged!

Patrick

[Lisa Burns]

I like that the indecision in the poem mirrors how a person -- particularly a woman -- feels when he or she is seeking love or acceptance. You don't have the right words. You hesitate. I love having that in a poem. Kudos.

[Astro Annie]

Oh, I love this. I like the idea of saying it one way and then going ...actually.... and saying something more intense. It builds that way. Well done.

[Skelasoldier]

Obviously a very passionate poem, keep up the good work.