This is from my book and based on a partial lyric a songwriter character came up with. I tried to flesh it out and the goal was to make it still sound like a song.
You know I’ve dreamed half my life away
And crashed hard when the fantasy
Didn’t turn out like I hoped it’d be
But those times seem so far behind me
Since good fortune seemed to find me.
Always wanted to share my dreams with someone
Never thought I would till now.
Without love my other dreams had no meaning
Now I thank Heaven that we dream together
I’m still a dreamer but reality’s so much better with you
Baby let’s keep livin’ the dream forever.
Love and romance were always elusive
And maybe now I know why.
Fate simply had other plans for me.
Before your love I was alone and uninspired.
On my own, disillusioned in every endeavor.
I’m still a dreamer but reality’s better than a dream with
you
3 years ago, when I was new on WC, I wouldn't have been able to appreciate this poem enough. But now as I ve grown a bit, I can relate to it in a much better way! This poem has a very positive, and musical vibe to it. It makes me feel all fuzzy with romance and happiness!
Truly great writing! ♡♡
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
I couldn't be more pleased. If you say it was musical, this poem must have achieved its goal. Thanks.. read moreI couldn't be more pleased. If you say it was musical, this poem must have achieved its goal. Thanks a million; you've made my day.
I appreciate your kind review, as always. This poem hasn't gotten as much traction as some the others but it is special to me. I like to say it's really my character's song and voice but I'm channeling it. The same is true of "Luminous."
"livin the Dream"
Jennie Baron,
Our dreams are very important and your poem gave a place for the pondering of this reality. Impressive to see you enjoy putting a song and it's subject into a real life song lived out.
This line was beautiful and showed the dream coming true:
"Always wanted to share my dreams with someone
Never thought I would till now.
Without love my other dreams had no meaning
Now I thank Heaven that we dream together."
Beautiful reality and a thankful voice rejoices.
Kathy
Jennie: Loved it, what great flow and the first stanza sounds so relateable filled with regret. It's so well written (Got to get to your book) and so sweet uplifting and romatic. Livin' the Dream, how inspiring. To find someone to love and for it to be returned is the dream, without it life's a very sad place indeed - the composition has great rhythm like a song, but that's also great with a poem, like yours. You wrote a poem about love, without all those filler words, like I do; no clique here. Just love, baby love. Sweet, clever and I love it. Thanks so very much! Great writing. Dale
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
You are so very welcome! Your kind reviews are so uplifting this morning, Dale.
9 Years Ago
My pleasure: Jennie, it's 11:58 here, but Good Morning Sunshine!!! Dale
This old man of mush love a well written romantically inclined poem ... Came home to eat a bite of lunch and shall leave with thoughts of candlelight dinner with the ex-wife now with me again, for old flames never die, but simply await refueling one quiet romantic evening at a time ... Thank you for the inspiration ...
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Glad you took some time to visit this little poem/song and that you were inspired!
"Without love my other dreams had no meaning... " Yes, to make reality a better living, everyone has to make dreams - big dreams.. love-dreams. Your poetry speaks allot through words. Enjoyed reading your poetry.
Simply beautiful and so romantic.
Had so much emotion and meaning to it.
Its great when you find the special someone, they complete you, this poem says this.
great write truly loved it :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Cimmy. This is one of my personal favorites. I always thank my character. I mu.. read moreThank you so much, Cimmy. This is one of my personal favorites. I always thank my character. I must have been channeling him, especially since this one actually rhymes! :)
9 Years Ago
I like the rhyming, quite allot :)
Your most welcome :)
Half of our life consists of dream, very true . So wisely observed by you . Dreams certainly beget illusions .
Loved the honesty in the write. The prose writer in you makes it so precise.
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Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
I appreciate your reading and the kind words. This is one of my favorites. I don't even usually rh.. read moreI appreciate your reading and the kind words. This is one of my favorites. I don't even usually rhyme, but I guess I was channeling the character so I have to credit him!
Awww this is so sweet and touching. I really like this and can feel the emotion. Love poems that make me feel this way. Very nicely penned
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
It's truly gratifying when your poems touch someone! Actually, I'm not sure if this is truly mine (.. read moreIt's truly gratifying when your poems touch someone! Actually, I'm not sure if this is truly mine (see the comment above the poem) but if it belongs to my fictional songwriter, I know he'd be gratified by it, too.
10 Years Ago
Oh you know I have been so off today I didn't even read that comment. They need to make those bigge.. read moreOh you know I have been so off today I didn't even read that comment. They need to make those bigger, lol. Or I need to go find my reading glasses. That might help. Well I did really enjoy it anyway
Music is a huge part of my life and an inspiration. My favorite bands include Train, Imagine Dragons, James, Matchbox Twenty, etc. And of course I still listen to all of those classic-rock songs tha.. more..