Graduation

 

A person could choke on the

Existential bullshit

That spills from your mouth

And eyes, and hands, and a*s.

 

I’m not interested

in those lines anymore,

about saving the world

and our own secret perfection

within ourselves.

 

You can’t see my reality.

bills, and drugs, and bodies

bathing in blood

and asphalt.

All outside my window.

 

The window where all you saw

was a flowering spring

sapling. And poetry.

useless rhymes and

intellectual images.

 

I’ve tried to swallow you.

And your optimistic bullshit

world you have created.

But it’s too much.

And far too bitter to ingest.

Author's Note

hooooray more drunk writing!!!

Reviews

[JRB]

i guess you were, nice thoughts,
Jan/uisiom

[Emily Rose]

Ah. A well-expressed sentiment felt by many (I'm sure) at graduation. (By me, too, to an extent, although I think I was more excited about leaving to really be mad at what the speakers were saying.) This is quite well done, although I think that a few of your periods could stand to be commas. Good job!

[Crazy Cat Man]

This is created from drunk writing????? But its great.....maybe i should try this technique. You are the Drunken Poet Master.......the title and the poem caught me off guard. It doesn't match but I love stuff like this. What kind of college did you went to? I think I have seen the TV show "The Wire" too many times...maybe you are writing about the ghetto.......none the less.......great write :D

[Jess: ~The Sidekick~]

I love how straight forward this piece is! And the imagery is wonderful... Not to mention that you've pretty much grasped my view of the world.

[Tim McGovern]

tell us how you really feel. don't hold back
: D
it's good drunken writing...tequila??

hey wait...this isn't about me is it?
: o

[Nyida Strong]

Hooray! This is a blatantly honest piece and I love it! I'm not optomistic and always see the world as it is, that is to say, I see the filthy truth in everything. You're too right, this is a world of excrement. Perfect write!

N. Strong

[Dawn Jones]

*APPLAUDES*

I love this. All those stupid people and their perfect images of a s****y world. You depicted well what a normal person, like myself, sees in the world. Good job.