Preface

His dream, a foreboding dream, Evan realizes... It's almost creepy...

The wind howled and the shutters fluttered on houses, whirlwinds of leaves impaled trees, and an ominous moon ruled the skies through angry black clouds releasing furies of heavy rain.   

  

Evan wandered helplessly through the forest, a foreign name on his lips.

 

“Callista, where are you?  Callista!”  He hadn’t any idea where he was; he only knew that he was lost. 
   

Still, he searched.  Searched for the girl he didn’t know, the girl he somehow knew he loved. 

 

A sudden stream of light broke through the darkness, and Evan would have been afraid, had it not been the most beautiful shimmer of light he’d ever seen. 

 

Rays of light flickered through suddenly cheerful clouds, and tiny opalescent orbs glimmered within.  Evan could not believe his eyes as a silhouette of light (within the light!) came down from the sky. 

 

As the silhouette neared, Evan could see it was the figure of a young woman.  She was tiny, almost wraithlike, in stature, ethereal in beauty, and long silver tresses cascaded about her pale, slender figure, making her appear remarkably delicate.  She wore glimmering golden robes that were perfectly accented with flecks of diamonds, though they couldn’t have been diamonds, as they were far more magnificent than any earthly gemstone could ever have been, and there were hundreds, no thousands of them, and they reflected a million tiny rainbows in every direction. 

 

Even more amazing, this young woman had strong, opulent wings that fluttered gracefully as she floated effortlessly to the ground.

Evan froze, enamored by her awe-inspiring beauty.  He couldn’t believe his eyes, and no words formed upon his lips. 

 

His throat went dry.

“Hello there, Evan.”  Her voice was gentle, melodic, yet somehow, full of authority. 

“H-how do you know my name?”  He stammered, nervous but not fearful.

She laughed, and it was a girlish giggle, almost as high as the pitch of a child‘s.

 

“I know all about you, Evan.  I am your Guardian Angel, Lucidity.  It’s my duty to know your name, among all other things.” 

 

“Why are you here?” 

“All in due time, my child.” Lucidity answered, nodding.  She closed her eyes, her  expression darkening as though something was only just occurring to her.
   

“Evan,” She then spoke cryptically, at last opening her eyes. “Even though we could not save you, you can still save her.” 
   

Ignoring Lucidity’s words of warning, Evan noticed then that her eyes were a deep violet blue, like a purple sunrise, almost as much so as his own sapphire gaze, and very, very large. He wanted to say something about them, but before he could make out the words, the wind howled causing the trees to shudder violently, sending Evan’s unruly ginger hair aflame in the night, and Lucidity, his Guardian Angel began to fade away into the night.
   

“Wait!  Where are you going?  You never answered my question!”  Evan yelled, but his words were barely audible over the roaring storm approaching.
   

“All in due time, my child.  All in due time…”  Lucidity’s melodic voice reverberated through the trees as she disappeared into the darkness
   

Evan fell to his knees in frustration, as a silver locket drifted from the sky, landing before him.
     

Broken by curiosity, Evan opened it, only to reveal a cheerful amber-eyed girl inside, smiling back at him.
   

Somehow, Evan knew exactly who she was. 
   

Somehow, he would have known her anywhere.
   
~*~

Evan jolted awake.  Choking on the stale air of his mediocre four-wall bedroom, he could barely breathe.  It had only been a dream, but it had felt so real to him.
   

It still felt real to him now, Evan realized, as his chest ached for her, longed for her, the girl of his dreams. 
   

As Evan turned over in his puny futon that was only temporary because of the move, he felt something cold and hard beneath his palm. 
   

“What the hell?” Evan gasped, realizing exactly what it was.
   

Chills of electric fear raced down Evan’s spine as held in his hand a silver engraved locket, the locket from his dream. 

Author's Note

What do you think? Be honest!

Reviews

[ElJays Nicholas]

You struck a chord in me, Raye! Of course, I'm biased because I believe love is universal, and romantic love is destined :P:P:P However, setting aside my bias, the preface is extremely well-written. You are a natural-born writer. Oh my!! I'm an old man!! Yes, I am going to give you an "when i was your age" line. Anyhow, when I was 18, and I tried to write something of a similar nature, a mystical, love story, for example, I always ended up falling on my face. For you it is natural. The preface ends a little bit cliche, in the sense that he wakes up from the dream to find the locket which was in his dream. It was expected. The story itself is NOT cliche however, if it means saving her from Bulimia (sp?). I don't recall a story like this ever being written, although I could be mistaken. The only thing I would change is how the preface ends. Maybe he doesn't find the locket immediately, or something like that. It's just a suggestion. I could be entirely wrong, of course. Maybe it works best exactly as you have it. I look forward to reading more....

[Dani California]

Whoa! What a mystical beauty this is! Makes one ponder ...
dreams. How real or unreal are they really. To follow one's
dreams is to make them a reality, yes? So, again I ask.. how real
are our dreams? Personally, I think our dreams determine everything...
they are who and what we are and where we end up if we
believe them to be real.

Again, this is a beauty! You certainly have a have awesome talent as a writer... !
I'm looking forward to reading what comes next..... :)

[Robert Luna]

Very interesting beginning and I can see a lot of potential with the story line. It was very inviting and held a wonderful charm to it. I think you are off to a good start and suggest to stick with it.


Well Done!!!!!!!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

""Callista, where are you? Callista!" He hadn't any idea where he was; he only knew that he was lost."

Great name!

I loved this piece. Nice work.

Peace and love,
Gabe

[Hannah!]

Wow. What a beginning. Evan's dream, and even his waking, read very much like a dream--it felt like a dream as I read it, which is impressive--I'm pretty sure I've only ever read one other story that made me feel like I'd dreamed the whole thing myself. I liked the description of Lucidity best; you spent a lot of time on her, which usually annoys me in character descriptions, but I think you handled it well. I would have liked a better idea of how Evan looks, but that's hardly the point of this chapter; I assume we're all going to get a better idea of who he is in the pages to come.

There were several typos, most of them concerning typos, that I noticed, and a few times when your word choice read awkwardly. I was also inclined to wonder why Evan's eyes were bluer than Lucidity's, when you'd already described the angle as having a beauty that was more-than-human. Besides that, though, there's really nothing that I can see wrong with this chapter. Good start!

[Legion]

Interesting. Will have to read more to be a bit more helpful. This is not necessarily an attention grabber piece, but it does make you wonder what is up and perhaps to keep on reading to see if it becomes something worthy to continue. In general, I like it.

[An owl on the moon]

The description and characters are beautifully written, and I love the way you capture us at the end of your piece with the locket! Wonderful passage!!!!!

[Heartless Breaker]

Dude, you have no idea of how I can relate to this...or do you?
Did I tell you about that? Was that one of the things we spoke about when I gave you a tarot reading?
I don't remember.
Anyway, I love this. There were, however, spelling errors. Did you mean "the trees shuddered"?
hehehe
Much love,
Yoshi♫

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

I think it's quite an interesting write!

You have my attention fully, but perhaps work on the length of your sentences?

I look forward to future installments..