Invisible

I see your beauty,
Alive in the moonlight.
I want to cry out--
I want to scream.
Anything,
To get you to notice me--
But you won’t,
And you never will…
For I am a plague to you--
A disease.
You don’t want me,
But you cannot get rid of me.
You just want to be rid of me--
As I am rid of you--
Rid of your love.
Free of your attention--
And trapped within my own desires.
I just want you to notice me.
I just want you to care.
I just want you to look at me--
To realize,

I am there.

Reviews

[Haden]

i don't know if they do but the rest of us certainly do! this has a nice rhythm to it. the "free of your attention" line almost seems like she's okay, but then, it's sad again .. "to realize I am there". biting for all of us who have been there.

[Cardinal Robin]

Yes isn't it beyond cruelty that the good one's cannot see our brilliance in the best of times...fie! We clam up or say something close to reading their mind and kerblooie! or they get freaked that we are so beyond their grasp or some dumb fear...it is our intense spirit...Alas! great write

[Casanova]

I liked the flow and the energy displayed in the words-I felt a desire reaching out

" to realize I am there"-thought provoking

[Brandon]

Nicely written, keep up the good work.

[THERISA]

Sadly, many of us feel this way with the people around us. Wishing to be notice and given attention to. But, i wonder, how would react if we did recieve this attention. Is this person worthy of your attention? Why is it that we set our love upon a person, who can't see us from a hole in the ground? Wish you find a person that is truly worthy of the love which you have within your heart. Your poem asks some many questions to me, while giving an insight into you, Raye. Thank you for sharing this very personal poem with us.

Therisa

[blue2u]

Amazing, I think you are my soul sister, once again I am feeling this right now.

[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

this is a great write! it's full of emotion and longing and really great provocative words like 'Scream' or 'plague' or disease'

really felt the emotion in this.

[Nithin.R.S]

Love is so extreme.And you have expressed a bit of your experience.A nice poem.

[Hope]

I love the flow, the descriptive feelings, you really got your emotions across to all of us readers. Great job! Your writing portrayed many thoughts and emotions of many very good. Excellent write.

I like the rythm to it. and lots of girls feel that way so you describing a constant feeling of sadness that normal high school girls feel.

[deadlife]

A wonderful write.
Painful.
Wrathful.
I feel like screaming!
. . .
Horrid one.

A favourite.