Sonnet 18 (Shakespearean Style)

What is it I did right to deserve you?

What charitable act did I complete?

How was it you I was able to woo?

What entitles me to love, your sweet treat

That just I was so graciously given?

I received a gift, unworthy of me

But to your heart is where I was driven

Sarah, you are more fair than eyes should see!

 

My dearest Jeff, your words are truly kind

But, I don’t agree with the words you speak

I think love has made both your blue eyes blind

But, alas, all of your words make me weak.

  I love the sweet nothings you always say

  Which is why I will be yours ev’ry day.

Author's Note

This sonnet is written as spoken word between two people:
The octave is spoken about Jeff (Me) and then the sestet is Sarah's reply.

Reviews

[Alicia™]

Aww, this is beautiful and very sweet!

[Joanna Maharis]

I like the way I was able to connect with the first speaker on an emotional level, in that I was able to feel is pain which really showed through the way of which he ached for her. I also could feel the passion and love the second speaker had for the first speaker.

[The Water Queen]

This is beautiful. The response makes the whole sonnet worth reading. Great job.

[Jessica]

I like the way you write it as a sonnet. You don't see much of that a lot, great write!

[MissWordSmith]

very nice write, but the flow was a little lost along the way/ however you've obviously grasped the idea of a sonnet and that in itself is great.

[Sarah]

The real question is what did i do to deserve you silly lol!

[Wicahpi]

A well crafted Sonnet with beautiful sentiment for a loved one.
Good job with this.

Peace n Light,
Wicahpi Iyozaza

[deeps]

This is so wonderful
I enjoyed this write.

[Tate Morgan]

This one I like

[Tina Kline]

I really love this one. I could see a man and woman performing this as I read it. You did a really really grand job on this.