A Love Story

This is the longest poem I think I've ever written

A Love Story

I saw you in my third period class

My mind let out a gasp

I saw your beautiful face

My heart began to race

You were finally alone

And your desk looked as if it was a throne

I felt the need to get closer

To wrap my arms around you, as if they were shelter

And to stare in your eyes

Make you forget all the other guys

But I thought you were still with him

And that my chances would be less than slim

So I tried to keep busy

Distract myself and keep my heart from getting dizzy

I tied my laces better so I wouldn’t fall

But I couldn’t keep from staring at you when you walked down the hall

You were my classmate

But I knew in the back of my mind you were my soul mate

It was hard to hide how much I wanted to be your guy

I would lie in bed at night asking myself why?

Why does she affect me like no one else?

Why does just hearing her name or smelling her perfume accelerate my pulse?

I tried to remain calm

Try not to show you, you already had me in your palm

Try to only be a friend

But I knew that would lead to a dead end

I found out you guys had broken apart

That hurt my heart

Yes, I was full of joy

But it hurt to know he had caused you such pain, stupid little boy

Your pain could never make me glad

And he had no idea what he had

I had been wanting to ask for your number

It was barely September

But I didn’t know you were dating again

You controlled the words the seeped out of my pen

But instead you found my number and contacted me first

I was so happy we had conversed

And now I could talk to you whenever

To slowly let you know what I wanted forever

I wanted to tell you so much

How you had me in your clutch

All it took was a touch to set my heart on fire

You were my medicine that could never expire

It was the beginning of October

I had a dream during my slumber

That I had bought a beautiful white-gold, diamond ring

And my heart wanted to sing

I woke up and things were not what they seemed

The next night again I dreamed

This time you had already said yes

And you were in a stunning dress

It was a warm November day, I wasn’t sure of the date

And after we wed I whispered in your ear we would never separate

But then I awoke

And my heart broke

My dreams were better than reality

Real life almost seemed like a heart’s fatality

I could not do this any more

I had to tell you how it was only you I could adore

The rest had disappeared

That you were my wyrd

I waited for you

But I tried not to tell you how much I loved you

But one day I confessed

And told you how I wanted our lips pressed

And you told me you were torn

And I knew this was the moment for which I was born

To prove I was a perfect match

That it was you I needed to catch

But a week later you threw it in my face

Made it seem like I was so easy to replace

I thought I died that night

Tears welled up in my eyes, causing me to lose my sight

I had to stop somewhere close

You were the one I had chose

I stayed there for a half hour

I didn’t know you had this power

To make me feel dead

To make me feel like I was in my eternal bed

That night I told another girl we could be together

But that idea wasn’t very clever

Because she wasn’t you

No one could replace you

But when I did that you started believing

And started to realize your feelings

And soon after you and him split

It was a Sunday, when I was given a gift

To try to mend your broken heart

To be the missing part

I left her for this task

It didn’t matter what she asked

I was yours

And opportunity had opened up its door

I told you everything I felt

And played with the cards I had been dealt

You were the queen of hearts

This is how it had been from the start

Attracted to you for reasons I did not know

But this time I couldn’t let you go

You had stolen a piece of me

Back in 9^th grade, when it had still been only you I could see

That entire year

I was drawn to you, but I was full of fear

So instead I watched you from afar

But you were the brightest star

So I let no one know I cared

As I saw you and stared

It’s amazing how time has gone so fast

But, enough of the distant past

I had to keep telling you

How very much I loved you

I wrote so many poems

You were the inspiration to all of them

And slowly, but surely

You began to fall for me

You started to tell me you loved me back

For so many reasons you couldn’t keep track

But if you were to make a list

Of the perfect guy, one no one thought could exist

That I would match every detail

And be the one to give you your fairy tale

Then November the 28^th arrived

The day of my birth, but I was soon to be surprised

Because two days later

I would receive a gift greater

Than any I had ever received

One I could barely believe

November the 30^th you told me you ready to press start

To our love game, you were ready for me to control your heart

So I quickly came up with a plan

To ask if you would let me be your man

I set up three notes

All three I had wrote

These were the only trace

Telling you to go to the next place

Until, like a fairy fable,

I led you to a park bench table

With a rose and card upon it

I walked up from behind while you opened it

And asked if you loved me

You told me yes, my heart jumped with glee

I asked you how much?

You replied so much

I asked if it was enough for you to be mine

I couldn’t believe how it was going to turn out this time

You smiled and told me yes

Soon after I told you I wanted foreve with you, nothing less

We always spell it without an r

Because r is the end of forever

Romeo and Juliet are fictional

But we ARE real

Pocahontas and John Smith?

You’re the one I am meant to be with

Tristan and Isolde?

Our love is more precious than gold

So let our story go down with the greats

Let there be no debates

Our love will never have an end

This is something most people cannot comprehend

That life can be full of glory

And you can make your own love story

By Jeff Miller

Author's Note

Wyrd is an Olde English word that is where our current word 'weird' derives from. However, wyrd meant an unknown path that was set out for you. Like fate or destiny

Reviews

[Joshua Donahue]

DUDE! This has to be like the best poem I have ever read on high school love! It shows the youth in it and yet, so much maturity. And you displayed the scenes wonderfully. Was all of this really real? Or did some of it come out your imagination? This is really good, but sort of long. Still, I love it!! The best part was the mention of the word "foreve" and how the "r" was left off because it was the end of it. I love it! Although I'm not if I entirely believed the female's returned love or not seeing as how she threw it in your face at first. Hmmm...but nevertheless, it was great! 100/100 I say!!

[QuietPoet]

This was so beautiful and amazing! I really hope this was true. Such a great love story, I wish my boyfriend would say all that and do that for me lol :)

[Therene]

Length: I'm scared. The reality is, I go to Author's Note before going over everything so I can skip what the other wants to skip. With your note, I went looking for the word. It was in the middle of the poem.

Technicals: Nice attempt to rhyme but there wasn't any meter. The flow is scratchy at some point.

But the content gets better. I like how you use previous love stories in reference to this one. Potentially making it appear better. :D Young love at its rawest position. Although I greatly disagree, you were able to lay out a story fine.

On one hand, you should have made this into a story. You have an established ending.

Overall, good job. Keep writing!

[Tina Kline]

Incredible. Such a wonderful love story in this poem. You did a great job on this, your efforts show.

[Poetic Beauty]

I loved this love story. The only thing is you might want to separate it into stanzas. It would make it a little more powerful and a little easier to read. But if you don't want to change it, the poem is great the way it is.

[The Water Queen]

I love how you told a story that went through many stages. It flowed nicely. Good job

[Ama May Cooper]

This is beautiful.. it brought tears to my eyes. so sweet and tender a tale x