Nevermore

My lips tremble and my Adam's apple quivers 
My heart beats faster and faster like an African drum 
My blood rises, you can feel the miniscule inferno, almost simulating a fever 
I have so many words to tell you so the following is only some 
I keep denying the truth 
And the truth is I'm in love with you 
I haven't told you for fear 
Fear that you, my beauty, would gallop away 
But I am changing my path 
Anything you want to know I will share 
Nevermore will anything be hid 
Nevermore will this Raven only come at night 
I shall be visible all day every day 
And no longer will the silence be tangible, no longer will I deal with this plight 
So I give credit to where it is due 
I must tell you...I am in love with you! 
 

Reviews

[Deepshikha]

Simply beautiful! All I can say, if I had a "friend-of-the-male-sex" who could dare to give me a poem like this, I'd be wonderfully surprised.
I did think the phrasing in this line, "I have so many words to tell you so the following is only some" was a little awkward, so there's constructive...
I really like the "Raven" analogy.

[Sarah]

all i think of is the simpsons NEVER MORE NEVER MORE

[Sarah]

See what i mean by you being the next Poe! mr nevermore raven!!! lol :) go heff!!! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):)

[Safrina]

This is so charming, the flow especially.
"My lips tremble and my Adam's apple quivers" Great

x

[Hailey]

great write,
good flow and excellent imagery
nice job, though u sent it to me through texting so im not sure what the point is in requesting me to read it X3
keep writing! though it doesnt look like i have to tell u that haha