Follow Your Dream, Follow Your Heart's Wish

This is really just a pouring out of feelings. I rambled and didnt worry about punctuation or anything until the end when I corrected it all.

You’re the only one I want you’re always on my mind nothing can distract me from you. Nobody else matters to me as much as you do. I would do ANYTHING for you. I want more than a friendship with you. I want to treat you like you should be treated. You deserve to be happy no matter what. I will just be your friend if I have to but I crave so much more. I feel like I need to be with you to be happy. I don’t wanna be dependent upon you or anyone else, but my emotions are centered on you. If you’re sad I am too. If you’re happy my mood naturally gets better. You make me smile, even if you don’t do anything. I can’t expect you to break up with your boyfriend for me…but it’s all I think about. You finally being mine. That’s what I want. You are literally the first thing I think about every morning and the last thing I think about at night. And you seem to be in my dreams almost all the time now. You’re my heart’s wish. People tell you to follow and pursue your dreams…so I am going to pursue you.

Reviews

[John W. Herron]

I like this piece because I can connect with it. Back in my high school days, I was madly in love with this girl, but she was already dating another individual and we always remained "just friends", and I remember having many of the same feelings you describe in this piece; lust, determination, satisfaction.

I can also relate to the emotional connections two people have as described in this piece:
"If you’re sad I am too. If you’re happy my mood naturally gets better. You make me smile, even if you don’t do anything."

Very strong, this piece is. Well done!

[Sarah]

i wish it was locked on my phone but no my old phone took a s**t and stopped working lol

[Sarah]

amazing. i dont have it locked on my phone though

[Mistaken]

I love it!!!! this was amazingness in poem form. I loved the emotion withheld and the passion in between the lines...i think you might want to change the last line though cuz it sounds kinda stalkerish but that might just be me...i'll have to read it againg. It is amazing so woot woot

[Sarah]

very nice very nice its still locked on my phone lol. i like it alot. its a paragraph full of emotion lol :)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow this is some pretty intense yearning and burning here.. a real obssessive lovelust story possibly as you mention the other is with another yet still would like to persist in the hunt of love. I love the honesty and openness that pours out here... who knows the other relationship may not last .. but just live, laugh and love life today and be yourself!!! Certainly loved to read this.. very high passion!!! (true to my soul) Bravo!

[Taylor Anne]

oh my gosh! i love this poem. and haha yeh i have pieces where i kinda just write cause thats the best way to express it but wow that's really like heart-piercing! (and word of advice, if there's a certain someone that's about show them the poem...she'll be yours in a matter of seconds...)