Here Comes The Rain

Cross between a dream or nightmare and my interpretation of it. I hope you enjoy

The Earth�s quivering heaps
silently cracked standing still
my heart laid dormant
preparing for a storm
Sleeping the sleep of the justified
but I haven�t slept in days
and no rest in sight
Translation of dark emerald grey
Fold and fall away
Morpheus�s lips drip wet
Upon his
Painfully passionate kiss

Embracing the darkness
As it chases the loneliness
of the light away
Falling deeper into dreams
Wishing to never awake

Sweet whispers speak

"Hold on to me
child of a mother�s
loveless love
Together we will fall
into a bottomless pit
Where we will
continuously drift the rift of time"

Empty souls join
Embodying danger

"Give yourself to me
Let yourself dream
I have such wonderful
Nightmares to bring

Sleep�sleep...just sleep
Maybe tonight I will take pity
upon your sleepless soul
Give you a chance at rest
Before I make you awake
with nightmarish screams
As you swing nicotine stained fists
at imaginary beasts

But you must sleeeeeep
So I can come out to play
Dark creature intertwine
Wooing in the pain of your mind
I will continue to
Talk sweetly in your ear
to remove your fears
Give you hope once again
This time you could win
Spin my beautiful lies
As I steal your life
Before the light of a new day
Chases me away"

Author's Note

Cross between a dream or nightmare and my interpretation of it. I hope you enjoy

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Such a scary dream to have, I can only imagine how a dream such as this would make me feel. It's beautifully written, so much so that it's easy to get lost in the words. As Brenda mentioned it does bring to mind depression but also of conflict. It almost as if there is a struggle to be free of something that feels bigger than you. I can definitely relate to that because I feel that way now and then too. How terrifying and helpless it leaves us and even worse, so vulnerable. Great writing, Robert you really took us there with you.

[Lucinda Bogart]

Sleep brings its own tragedy. The wounded and weary wonder aimlessly in an attempt to flee the haze of the walking dream state that is more real than any lifetime, and more tragic than any dream.

[Jd Young]

A very scary dream to have indeed. It's almost like your describing a night-terror. But there is something calming about this poem, all the while it still being scary. It brings my mind to places where I know that I'm not supposed to lurk. To places where I know that I'm not supposed to be.

An alluring write Robert.
Well Done.

[Tania Leigh]

"Embracing the darkness
As it chases the loneliness
of the light away"

Only in nightmares would that stanza not be thought of as backwards. It's my favourite stanza, and I must tell you, it wasn't easy to choose.

I love this:
"But you must sleeeeeep
So I can come out to play"

The very essence of creepiness! This is an excellent piece, Robert.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

oh robert, i love this piece... all the images that flashed into my head as i read each line - this is amazing - i enjoy your writing so much

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Great images ... the lack of sleep .. the nightmares .. i am thinking Freddie Kruger .. !
This one is a favorite for me .. very good writing and metaphoric.
The picture so stark .. the man looks so miserable and we can't see his face ..
Your words float well through my head.

Chloe
xoxo

[dawnmarie]

well done excellent write !!!!!

[Nicholas Hallows]

The dreamscape you create here is great.

Together we will fall
into a bottomless pit - I really liked this.

and this:

Translation of dark emerald grey
Fold and fall away
Morpheus's lips drip wet
Upon his
Painfully passionate kiss - brilliant!

Very well done!

NH

[Jack]

such a complex journey through a troubled mind that seems to be lacking sleep. You took us as the reader to the depths of the darkness of your imagination and delivered us to a place we can see and almost taste.

[Petey]

This was so visual. I had my imagination have a ball seeing all the scenes you paint here.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I am both frightened and amazed by this piece. Imagery was great! Loved this piece! You really took your readers through your dream/nightmare.


Great Write