Saturday Nights and Sunday Mornings

Trying something a little different. I hope you enjoy

Quarter til three a.m.
The phone rings
My hello answered with tears
and a voice saying
�It�s me dad, Stephen�
I�ve messed up really bad
took all the money you had
about to board a bus to L.A.
I�ve just got to get away
I can�t face my mistakes
Didn�t want to call
But it just felt wrong
not to at least say goodbye
and tell you what was going on

Marcy�s pregnant, she due in June
I tried to get her to leave too
wanted to take care of her
especially with the baby on the way
I thought we would always be together
Said she couldn�t
wouldn�t
didn�t want to be with me
after I got kicked out of school
They found drugs in my locker
I wanted to tell you
but I was too ashamed
Couldn�t bring myself to see the hurt in your eyes
and to know I was to blame

Choking back my own tears
Trying to find the words to say
A lump resting in my throat
I speak
Stephen please don�t go
We can face this together
No matter what you�ve done
You are still my son
and I love you
Come home so we can talk
We can work this all out
If you leave you�ll never know
Just come home son
If you run now
you�ll be running the rest of your life

But dad I feel so lost
I just don�t know if you�ll see me the same
Look at all I�ve done
How could I ever face you again

Son I love you
Just come home
You will always be my son
No matter what you�ve done
Please just come home

Alright dad I�ll come home
Good, see you soon

Phone hangs up
Silence on the other end
Wrong number
it would seem
but
To the right man
I think to myself
I guess I would�ve made a good dad

Author's Note

Trying something a little different. I hope you enjoy

Reviews

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Wow, this poem is great! This could make an awesome story, too. I liked the way you put the dialogue in the poem and actually made the piece more interesting. The tittle really attrcted me, just so you know. I realized the poem was way better than it, though. The content flows really well. I can see it all happening right in front of me. Pretty sad story. You tricked me, I actually thought he was the real father, a good writer does that. I really liked this poem a lot. Just letting you know, I'm adding it to my library.

[Jenny Davis]

This is fantastic, Robert. I can almost hear country music in the background as it is very much along the lines of something Randy Travis or other favorites of mine would sing. The ending was PERFECT, what a twist and oh so clever! At the same time, as most of your writing has, there is a message here...to help people even if you don't know them...extremely well written, my friend, kudos :)

[Dezaraye]

This piece is powerful, Robert. It makes me so sad in such a way ... I know that if this ever happened to me, my invitation to come back home wouldn't be there ... and if it were, it would be platonic so that they'd look good for the neighbors. The love of a father is something that's irreplaceable in a life and that warm invitation to come back home and the message that everything can be worked out is priceless. I so wish that life could be this way for everyone ...

[An Ordinary Woman]

I think it is magnificent on several levels- the first being how I relate to it. It hits home with me, because of my friend that is no longer. Your writing often sends me down memory lane to some extent and this is no exception. I do think the ending is superb in that I didn't see it coming at all ans it really makes me think.
As always, excellent writing!

[DeAn]

wow. this was awesome. and what a finale! I loved it. very creative and thought provoking, makes us wonder if given the oppotunity would we have done the same.

thanks for sharing it!
great job

l8r g8r
-Tao

[Christel Grady]

You've done it again! Absolutely an emotional rollercoaster with a smile at the end.

[Bubo]

Oh what a beauty........the joy of giving, of helping, and it could easily be one of our children........this really was one of my fave writes by you..........so clear, so loving and the way it ended was unforseen, but perfect.
You truely are the rock star of the cafe :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Definetly different from what i've seen, but you always pull off your work so well. Nicely done, wonderfully written and heartfelt.


Great Write

[Brianna Brie]

No other writer has brought tears to my eyes as many times as you. Yes, I am weepy again. This is an inspiring piece of writing on human nature. The desire to be loved and accepted unconditionally runs deep. Your ending is nothing short of pure genius. What wheels turning inspired this piece?

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Well Robert you took a chance and it paid off, gripping! And something most parents would identify with. The ending was a complete surprise to me, so sad as well. I think you handled a sensitive issue with love and care. Your choice of words, excellent throughout, it does sound like a true conversation. The angst of both parties is well-written and you are right it is very different...Kudos Robert ........
Cheers,
Helen :-)))

[Tania Leigh]

Oh, Robert.....what a surprise ending to this. It is a fantastic write!

"Wrong number
it would seem
but
To the right man "

Brilliance!