Summer Love

Summer or not.. i love you.

Days become longer, nights grow shorter.

I can feel the tender summer air

Sitting here beside you, I can feel your warmth

The ocean breeze envelops us

Your hands in mine, we’re intertwined

The sea ripples, joining the tides of my happiness

And we watched as it floods the shore

I stared at the birds soaring toward the horizon

Then I looked straight at you

Not afraid to get lost in the depths of your eyes

I kissed you, a seal of my pure affection

I thought time stopped… yet…

The sun already sets, the cerulean sky turns crimson

Now, summer is almost over.

Don’t worry. The season will end,

But my affection will never fade

This summer is not the last time we’ll be together

I promise you, I’ll love you until my one last breath

Author's Note

I want to go to a beach right now. So I just got an idea of writing this. :)
Hope you'll like it! Please leave a honest review. :D

Reviews

[reflectingus]

This is just beautiful. I could actually imagine a little scenario in my head. Summer loves are definitely amazing, this poem is just so romantic, I love that romantic scene that you have created, and well, it's just beautiful. It just seems to have flown freely, and has this very relaxing mood, and now I just can't wait for summer. And the reddish yellow skies at sunset. I just have one suggestion though. I see you're talking about everything in present tense aren't you? Then it is always better to ensure you keep that up throughout the poem, (lines 8 and 11 in particular), I just felt instead of 'stared' you could say 'stare' and 'kiss' instead of 'kissed', because then the whole poem would be in on tense. Nevertheless, this is a very sweet, summer-y poem, I enjoyed.

[tk]

wow. that's really romantic.
the way you captured those moments is just amazing. i loved how you pictured the summer: from the tender summer air to the the cerulean sky turning crimson. :)
and the passion added interest to me while reading this. i imagined clearly the image you wanted to convey.
such a noteworthy write coming from an excellent writer. GOOD JOB on this!! :)
♥♥♥

[Desmund Tiny]

sus..... ayeeee gusto nya kasi magswimming din eh....buwahahahahahahahahahha..... great poem...

[Amata Luna]

Surely Jed, your imagination is just as fascinating. I can see the depth and the love you put in all of these. In fact, It's as if I'm watching all the words happening in a picture. Well penned. Written from the heart.

Walang italic for the reviews, but really you are in love! Italicize the "are". Your poem is oozing with love and the virus affects us all. A great piece Jed. Just like how I remember Shakespeare's Sonnet 18. :)

[Kuhr Gred]

haha... I think .. you just miss her a lot because the 4th yr. life is nearly over? :D but amazing poem... :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

nice job!

so far, this has to be my favorite poem from you

[Thea]

"This summer is not the last time we’ll be together" SUMMER TRAINING XD
Haha! Great vocabulary and you're really improving...Kasi inspired...Ako expired! XD
The imagery is totally astounding, I can nearly imagine the two of you... XD
So passionate and romantic...Sana may happy ending kayo... :p
Wahaha, peace! Nabbaliw n ko! XD

[Shy Girl]

I love the beach...actually at any season...the breakers sing and call to me often.. sounds fanciful but that's how I feel about them..just as you have let us all feel the love you have for summer...seems that maybe somebody is behind this feeling as well...like you visit them only in the summer and the affection is tied to the ocean where you and they meet...like a retreat of sorts. Where there is nothing else but you...ocean...the wildlife...and possible person to share it with. Oh...and summer does lend a hand in the smiles we all share upon it's arrival :) I enjoyed this very much. It reads like a love of summer of course...but the ending hints at a special somebody to share it with... :)

[Tai Ryens]

You painted such a perfectly amazing picture in my head, slowly adding in every little detail while still keeping it interesting all the same. You have selected a fine choice in words as well, each and every word just added to the delight of this very piece of poetry.
Amazing job, keep it up!