A Senryu Night

A Senryu Night

A Poem by JBoone

Night filled with bad dreams

Panic, fear; tear stained pillow

Alarm brings relief

© 2016 JBoone


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JBoone
First attempt at Senryu. Syllables are in 5-7-5 format.

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This is a great senryu . . . in these very short poems, I'm looking for word choices that are packed with sensation & meaning, since there are so few words to work with. You've done that very well here, painting a vivid scenario with an interesting twist in the last line. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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So true! How the alarm becomes the rescuer . Nice senryu.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a great senryu . . . in these very short poems, I'm looking for word choices that are packed with sensation & meaning, since there are so few words to work with. You've done that very well here, painting a vivid scenario with an interesting twist in the last line. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I really like this one, reads different from what you usually write, I think but well. I'd even say this is your best up to date.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JBoone

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
V

8 Years Ago

My pleasure.
This is really good! Captures a whole scene in three lines. I also can relate to this because I have had nightmares before, but saved by the bell (TV show reference, anyone?). The only time an alarm won't save is during a night terror or sleep paralysis - it's the worst!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JBoone

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
GalaxyGhost

8 Years Ago

you're welcome!
Bad dream? Described wonderfully. Good work!


Posted 8 Years Ago


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JBoone

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
Wow, that sounds like a really rough night! Nice senryu, and that title was eye-catching.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JBoone

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I appreciate it. Trying to improve.

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