Of Doubt

Free Write

Everything must be poetic. The cat is cross eyed. The breeze is wet.

The little baby flies solicit the center of the bedroom. Flying in small circles chaotically.

The sun is hiding and I really don't mind.

The internet's been down for 3 days but I would've sworn it's been a week.

So I'm writing on my own time..

My friend's lost all hope for the world.

And I'm not in it to save it.

Here I am blowing ashes

Onto the fresh, clean floor.

My time to feed is dawning again.

The hour's've passed and it's

afternoon time or

breakfast

before my 4 o'clock shift

I want to send for a cab so I don't have to walk

Just want to get stoned and by myself just talk with my mouth shut as I push on these buttons - they're black with white letters. The desk is green and my smoke is a prominent grayish blue hue of coiling heat in the open room with all the windows cracked wide, it's raining,

no, relight the cherry,

the outside is moist, the bushes, brambles and grass fresh in the absence of this mornings rain, it's too much,

I've got to make the call.

I'd like to walk but my fingers are cold and I'm blazed to the core

I'll wait until I forget I don't want to speak.

Yes it's all wrong..

Author's Note

- The Inner Opposer

Reviews

[caesarkreshen]

Can you fly in a circle chaotically?

[Jazmen]

Why not? cuz it's a circle? should I have said "chaotically flying round and round?" what's the difference? around they went in a circle. chaotically. maggots learning how to fly like flies. swirling in the center of the room.

[caesarkreshen]

a circle is the opposite of chaos. Yes swirling round and round would have been more fitting.

Circles, lines are absolute. Chaos is disorder.

[Jazmen]

Thanks for the tip but I like it the way it is.

[caesarkreshen]

Didn't mean it as a "tip", but okay, I apologize for upsetting you.

[MOON]

Love the way you start this poem, random thoughts and yet you manage to give it life and commentary .love I am blazed to the core.

[Jazmen]

thanks! I appreciate your insight..
I like that line too.. it fit very well, I think.

[MOON]

Yes it did perfectly

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

I like how it drifts in and out of reality..it is a little like being stoned..the imagery is kinda vivid...there's a lingering frustration, but sedation and relaxation are apparent. It has some interesting overlapping layers...IDK it's just an intriguing piece..a landscape for the mind to sit and relax with

[Jazmen]

thanks for your review of this one.. it was written very quick and with not a lot of patience. the lingering frustration and the sedation are spot on, I think, too. Anyway, thanks for reading.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

anytime...love ur work...if I manage to say anything useful, I more than happy :)