Stick People

911 Emergency, What can i do?

HELP ME, GOD PLEASE HELP ME!!

What is it sir, whats wrong?

MY HANDS ARE GONE! MY HANDS ARE GONE!

Sir calm down please, Calm down..

Just explain whats goin on..

I WOKE UP THIS MORNING!

MY ARMS WERE F*****G STICKS!!

I PULLED THE COVERS OFF MYSELF...

EVERYTHING WAS STICK!!

I RUSHED INTO THE BATHROOM...

LOOKED INTO THE MIRROR...

I COULD SEE RIGHT THROUGH MY HEAD!!

EVERYTHING WAS CLEAR!!

THE ONLY FACE I HAD...

A CIRCLE, TWO DOTS, A SNEER!!!

I RAN OUT MY HOUSE SCREAMING!!!

TOOK A LOOK AROUND!!

EVERYBODY LOOKED LIKE ME!!

FIVE STICKS, A HEAD THATS ROUND...

Sir, That isn't funny..

This line is for emergencies only.

Please don't call back...

unless there's something really wrong..

REALLY WRONG? IS BEING A STICK PERSON RIGHT?

Well I've been one forever sir...

And me well I'm just fine.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tracie Skarbo]

This one had me laughing...I love the image you have given here...boy to wake up as a stick person...who would have thought! Great idea and great effort.

Tigra

[Flo_writer]

Lol, as unique and entertaining as they get. I think I would've freak out of my mind had that been me. I like the way you wrote this. The style fit very well for this poem. I could see you really thought about this and as a reader I'm very happy with the end results. Thanks for the fresh air of creativity.

[DiggeyEleven]

That was a wonderful, funny, smart poem. Smart if you are trying to convey the lack of individuality in this world, not too much of a lack, but there is a lack. Good beat to the poem to, the kind you might even read to your kid and while they may not understand they may very much enjoy. When your stick character looked in the mirror, and only saw two dots and a sneer, was my favorite moment in the poem. I could imagine it so clearly, and it made me laugh out loud. Kind of wish it went longer, just describing more of his lackluster world, but I did love the ending, and I loved this poem.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

That was a brilliant satire of conformity and lack of individualism. Very smart and witty. Thank you for the suggestive read. I will be back! ;)

[gravitylava]

hahaha! this is really funny and creative.
great write =D I am in love with this poem.
nice.
-michelle

[Raven Wilson]

I love the way this is written!
Normally I wouldn;t even think of a stick figure as a conformity, but now that you have me thinking I see it more adn more. Most people cand raw only stick figures, its a connecting line that can be emphasized and ...just wow

[Fear Corrupts!]

conformity, and lack of character, yes?

[Fear Corrupts!]

This is pretty creative, I love the dialogue.
I like how you used a stick person to represent conformity, I've never seen that used before.
Good Write,

Molly*