Perceived perfection

An endless persuit of perfection plagues

the sort time I have

 

Aches, pains, and internal bruising leave

my hands spending more time patrolling

my face than chasing their own dreams

 

Any attempt of reading the book of posibilities

forces my eyes to squint as the words simply

become impossible to make-out and I can never

seem to find any glasses 

 

Gazing into space and all I notice is the clear

absence of stars which used to inject an

overwhelming sence of tranquillity making

me ask the question why I can no longer mavel

at their former brilliance as any attempt to

recapture the image leaves my hand grasping

thin air

 

I guess it's time to let your shadow fade into a

distant memory as it's apparent I'm unable

to change you  

Reviews

[Lydia]

I really like this. It's pretty, and it flows well.

[Nautili]

The ironic part was when I was squinting trying to read this because I was too lazy to find my reading glasses, and then I read,

"Any attempt of reading the book of posibilities

forces my eyes to squint as the words simply

become impossible to make-out and I can never

seem to find any glasses "
couple minor mistakes: short.possibilities. and marvel.
This is true: we can only change ourselves. Good write.

[Hayley]

An excellent ending. Potent word choice and a unique way of writing in this topic.
"Gazing into space and all I notice is the clear
absence of stars which used to inject an
overwhelming sence of tranquillity making
me ask the question why I can no longer mavel
at their former brilliance as any attempt to
recapture the image leaves my hand grasping
thin air"
Wonderful writing!

[ghost writer]

I like introspective pieces..if you wear your heart on your sleeve its bound to get a little dirty..if you roll it up though it doesn't get anything..poignant write

[Coyote Poetry]

When you seek perfection. Failure will be the end. After success. Where can you go? I like the way you moved in the poem. The thoughts leading to a very good ending. Sometime we must accept we done a good job and move on. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[TheSweet]

There is a lot of depth here looking into such a small thing. Perfection, of course, if always impossible. I really like the ending of this, also. Good write, thanks for sharing :)

[Cassie Fraga]

Expressed very clear here!! great job!!

[Thea]

A really fine piece of writing...The emotions flowed so well...
:)))

[Becky Clancy]

Its was a very nice piece of work you have here, keep up the good work :3

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Raw, emotional piece. Nicely written.